I just read the whole archive and enjoyed it greatly. In terms of storytelling, I think you have something solid going on...it reads like a true experience in the beginning, and is realistic enough that I was completely on board for the suspense, and finally the exciting...well, I'm not sure if this is near the ending, but it's progressed very nicely regardless! It's been a pleasure; looking forward to more pages!
Oh wow, I only just realised you were doing this because I came over to say congrats on being nominated 'most supportive reader' :)
This looks really interesting and you've written a lot so I'll have to come back later and read right through (when it's dark!!!!!!!!!).
Dear Little Swan,
Freedom! At least from the slab. She can now use some of those implements of terror on the gouls who would have her for dinner,provided "the crimson life slipping down her limb" is not to great a distraction. Great Page! hope to see more of your wounderful story. tommym P.S. nice depiction of your hand.
Banes at 9:38PM, Nov. 13, 2011
p.s. I hope Grandma's alright, but I fear the worst...
Banes at 9:37PM, Nov. 13, 2011
I just read the whole archive and enjoyed it greatly. In terms of storytelling, I think you have something solid going on...it reads like a true experience in the beginning, and is realistic enough that I was completely on board for the suspense, and finally the exciting...well, I'm not sure if this is near the ending, but it's progressed very nicely regardless! It's been a pleasure; looking forward to more pages!
Limzee at 5:55PM, Nov. 3, 2011
Oh gosh, yay, I didn't see that this updated! And two pages more, too! I hope you pick it back up soon. :]
skyangel at 5:31AM, Oct. 2, 2011
Oh wow, I only just realised you were doing this because I came over to say congrats on being nominated 'most supportive reader' :) This looks really interesting and you've written a lot so I'll have to come back later and read right through (when it's dark!!!!!!!!!).
tommym at 7:18AM, Sept. 9, 2011
Dear Little Swan, Freedom! At least from the slab. She can now use some of those implements of terror on the gouls who would have her for dinner,provided "the crimson life slipping down her limb" is not to great a distraction. Great Page! hope to see more of your wounderful story. tommym P.S. nice depiction of your hand.