(2005) Side Story - Page 09

Hawk on May 11, 2013

If I were to rewrite this story today, this is another one of the pages that would change drastically.  Vivian has all the subtlety and finesse of an Adam Sandler movie right here.  I suppose it shows her confidence, asking Alec with Brooke right there to rebuttal, but it probably would have been better for Vivian to play it more sneaky.  She could have approached him privately days after her trap was sprung, and just talked to him as a friendly gesture of “Hey, I'm a better option”. 
 
And I'm trying to figure out what was going on in the bottom middle panel.  I think I was trying to show Alec thinking for a moment to come up with a good reply, but it totally looks like he's checking her out.  I would change that whole panel.  I would change all the panels, honestly.  Bad composition.