Cwen can't fly I'm afraid, as will become clear in future pages. Her wings are far to small to really be much use.
Granted Cwen is moving through the air at a high velocity but not under her own power, rather she got a "boost" to get her started on her revenge trip.
Ah ha! That makes far more sense!
However, it doesn't look that way to me. I'll explain:
The first and second panel both appear partly cloudy with nothing in the background, which makes me assume sky. Also, the clouds appear to have shadows on the shadows on the side closest to the bottom of the page, and the shaded side of a cloud would be its bottom.
The bit of land appears more to be a distant mountain, but probably because I perceived the shot to be looking straight out to begin with. The balcony from which she was kicked might have worked better.
I was also unaware this was a floating island, I just thought it was on top of a mountain, with a VERY steep drop off the side.
The speed lines only really show me that she is moving away, not necessarily down, or any other direction.
To make things clearer, I might suggest actually having something in the background to show that there is land and/or water, or if you'd like to say that it's all clouds, a classic Cwen-shapped hole from her falling through? Something in the foreground to give perspective may also work equally well.
The third and fourth panel look like it's storming, and an all cloudy background, and I just assume she is coming from where she was going in the first half.
I completely agree that it's better to see her face in this shot. I think that it would follow her motion more naturally if she were upside down, though.
Was that "Years later..." there the first time?
Hopefully something I've said here helps, or at least helps you see why I misinterpreted it.
I think it's great and I catch what you were trying to convey. It makes sense and is well done, in my opinion. I can't wait to see what will come on the next page. ^^
TheTim: While yes, she did seem to "spaztically" flip over from falling forwards to falling backwards, I thought it would be excusable because it's more interesting seeing her face while she's falling.
Though one thing that may not be obvious is that she is falling with her BACK GOING TO THE GROUND! Or the ground that isn't visible because she's falling from so high up, she was kicked from a floating Island up in the sky. So she is falling WAAYY down; falling AWAY from the camera...and then the last two panels she's flying up TORWARDS the camera. I'll try to make this more obvious in the next page. The little tip of landscape is the tip edge of the island, which I'm starting to regret bothering to include at all...as it seems to just confuse people more.
I'd like to edit this page to make it more obvious what's going on...but I was kind of hoping the little bit of speedlines, at least the ones in the first panel, would show which way she's falling. I'm not sure entirely how to fix this problem...other than try to add more clouds in the background or different speedlines.
Sorry for the confusion guys.^^;
Inconsistent!!!!! She was already past the peak of her flight and already into a descent by the last page! Here she appears to be going straight or slightly up! I think my complaint is more with the motion lines from the last page, though. I'll forgive the direction she's facing, as she certainly could have turned, plus it gives a much better effect. Considering her position at the end of the last page, upside down might have worked better. Thinking of it in my mind it seems funnier too, but maybe it wouldn't translate well to paper/screen? It's a good page, but it seems like it has potential for being a little better.
Overall, I think these first 3 pages have gotten this comic going quite nicely. Despite the limited information or 3 pages, I feel strangely knowledgeable of the character already. I find myself thinking that there will be many flashbacks throughout the pages to come. Not that that's a bad thing.
Also, very nice transition into what I assume is present day.
BlackAceX at 6:46PM, Jan. 3, 2011
She looks really pissed off. =.=
ExPaladin at 1:27PM, Oct. 20, 2010
Wait, he's a she? :S This is some genious stuff :D
Elkian at 5:19PM, Sept. 17, 2010
Bookends ^^
CryForE at 10:15AM, May 6, 2009
Nice page! And yea, did get it in the first go that she were falling down, then years later she returns - Same way for the dramatic effect perhaps? :P
Elkian at 11:40AM, Jan. 1, 2009
yee-haw
Yayap at 3:18AM, Sept. 15, 2008
argh disorienting! wait? if this is all one fall... where did the chlothes come from?
Reitei at 4:26PM, Aug. 25, 2008
she must have some wicked vocal cords to be screaming that long.
Forewarned at 9:28AM, Jan. 24, 2008
Thys ys just lyke dyskworld
Derkomai at 10:32PM, Jan. 18, 2008
I feel the same way sometimes. Have you considered pot as an alternative?
mayshing at 8:03PM, Dec. 24, 2007
ha ha ha ha~ ROFL
BIueBoy at 11:34AM, Dec. 21, 2007
children are very aerodynamic
Dark_Maniac at 1:17AM, Dec. 2, 2007
That is so not a 'happy face'.
Red Slayer at 12:44PM, Dec. 1, 2007
I feel the same.
Evil Emperor Nick at 2:35PM, Nov. 30, 2007
Cwen can't fly I'm afraid, as will become clear in future pages. Her wings are far to small to really be much use. Granted Cwen is moving through the air at a high velocity but not under her own power, rather she got a "boost" to get her started on her revenge trip.
roycemarie at 8:41PM, Nov. 29, 2007
These panels make sense to me. So, years later... Did Dad know she could fly when he booted out?
Kyofan11230 at 8:14PM, Nov. 29, 2007
O.O huh?
TheTim at 5:18PM, Nov. 29, 2007
Ah ha! That makes far more sense! However, it doesn't look that way to me. I'll explain: The first and second panel both appear partly cloudy with nothing in the background, which makes me assume sky. Also, the clouds appear to have shadows on the shadows on the side closest to the bottom of the page, and the shaded side of a cloud would be its bottom. The bit of land appears more to be a distant mountain, but probably because I perceived the shot to be looking straight out to begin with. The balcony from which she was kicked might have worked better. I was also unaware this was a floating island, I just thought it was on top of a mountain, with a VERY steep drop off the side. The speed lines only really show me that she is moving away, not necessarily down, or any other direction. To make things clearer, I might suggest actually having something in the background to show that there is land and/or water, or if you'd like to say that it's all clouds, a classic Cwen-shapped hole from her falling through? Something in the foreground to give perspective may also work equally well. The third and fourth panel look like it's storming, and an all cloudy background, and I just assume she is coming from where she was going in the first half. I completely agree that it's better to see her face in this shot. I think that it would follow her motion more naturally if she were upside down, though. Was that "Years later..." there the first time? Hopefully something I've said here helps, or at least helps you see why I misinterpreted it.
Kikaru at 3:11PM, Nov. 29, 2007
Daddys little girl back for revenge? o.o
Ogre fairy at 2:11PM, Nov. 29, 2007
I think it's great and I catch what you were trying to convey. It makes sense and is well done, in my opinion. I can't wait to see what will come on the next page. ^^
SarahN at 2:07PM, Nov. 29, 2007
TheTim: While yes, she did seem to "spaztically" flip over from falling forwards to falling backwards, I thought it would be excusable because it's more interesting seeing her face while she's falling. Though one thing that may not be obvious is that she is falling with her BACK GOING TO THE GROUND! Or the ground that isn't visible because she's falling from so high up, she was kicked from a floating Island up in the sky. So she is falling WAAYY down; falling AWAY from the camera...and then the last two panels she's flying up TORWARDS the camera. I'll try to make this more obvious in the next page. The little tip of landscape is the tip edge of the island, which I'm starting to regret bothering to include at all...as it seems to just confuse people more. I'd like to edit this page to make it more obvious what's going on...but I was kind of hoping the little bit of speedlines, at least the ones in the first panel, would show which way she's falling. I'm not sure entirely how to fix this problem...other than try to add more clouds in the background or different speedlines. Sorry for the confusion guys.^^;
TheTim at 12:45PM, Nov. 29, 2007
Inconsistent!!!!! She was already past the peak of her flight and already into a descent by the last page! Here she appears to be going straight or slightly up! I think my complaint is more with the motion lines from the last page, though. I'll forgive the direction she's facing, as she certainly could have turned, plus it gives a much better effect. Considering her position at the end of the last page, upside down might have worked better. Thinking of it in my mind it seems funnier too, but maybe it wouldn't translate well to paper/screen? It's a good page, but it seems like it has potential for being a little better. Overall, I think these first 3 pages have gotten this comic going quite nicely. Despite the limited information or 3 pages, I feel strangely knowledgeable of the character already. I find myself thinking that there will be many flashbacks throughout the pages to come. Not that that's a bad thing. Also, very nice transition into what I assume is present day.
Chameleon Kid at 11:55AM, Nov. 29, 2007
Not much has changed in her life eh? XD *lol* You two make a pretty good team!
kyupol at 8:27AM, Nov. 29, 2007
so shes flying DBZ style?