LotL, I have that problem too.. I have a serious story but I keep adding slap sticky stuff. Anyway, hope you are feeling better and look forward to your return.
Hmm, I was afraid I made them look too important. I realized a while back that I wasn't doing a good job explaining who's doing what. Also, the tone issue came up accidentally. I realized around page 11 that everything seemed too slap-stick. So I used that as a transition point and from here on out the tone will be fairly constant(part of the reason I'm taking a hiatus is to script ahead and make sure I have everything properly in order this time).
I'm glad you mentioned about the exposition though. Since it's my story it all seems obvious to me. No one told me otherwise so I just kept plowing along.
Don't forget to explain who the two men he blew up in the tavern were, because they have yet to be explained.
This comic seems interesting, but I am not sure if it is meant to be funny or serious so far.
I think you need to do more exposition, because I am finding it hard to grasp what the characters are all doing.
Aghammer at 9:12AM, Dec. 12, 2008
LotL, I have that problem too.. I have a serious story but I keep adding slap sticky stuff. Anyway, hope you are feeling better and look forward to your return.
Lady of the Lake at 8:52PM, Nov. 13, 2008
Hmm, I was afraid I made them look too important. I realized a while back that I wasn't doing a good job explaining who's doing what. Also, the tone issue came up accidentally. I realized around page 11 that everything seemed too slap-stick. So I used that as a transition point and from here on out the tone will be fairly constant(part of the reason I'm taking a hiatus is to script ahead and make sure I have everything properly in order this time). I'm glad you mentioned about the exposition though. Since it's my story it all seems obvious to me. No one told me otherwise so I just kept plowing along.
harkovast at 5:02PM, Nov. 13, 2008
Don't forget to explain who the two men he blew up in the tavern were, because they have yet to be explained. This comic seems interesting, but I am not sure if it is meant to be funny or serious so far. I think you need to do more exposition, because I am finding it hard to grasp what the characters are all doing.