Why does it look like shes giving him a blow job or is it just cause im perverted. Only kidding it doesnt look like that... WHAT Im still perverted. Like your comic and thanks for your comments ill keep reading this.
You do great work on expressions, especially the final panel, which is very well drawn and has good use of shadows, despite the lines being a bit shaky.
The shaky lines is something that comes up a lot, and while it doesn't matter that much, especially when the images are so large it's quite easy to see. Perhaps try doing longer, smoother strokes with the pencil, pressing lighter and going over the line a few times to give definition rather than doing a single, hard shaky line? Just a suggestion.
Something i've noticed that really should be commended is your use of panel layout and timing - even this early on you show great skill in organising the panels so the story flows well, and making speech bubbles that don't interfere with the art. Keep this up and your natural progression with the art will surely make this comic a winner.
One final note for this page (man i ramble a lot, sorry) is that the hand in the first panel is a little off - they're always very hard to draw, so it's a good idea to try and find some kind of reference, even if it is just looking at your own hand and trying to copy that. (Trying to get the right pose with your hand can be awkward though, so a mirror and camera work wonders.)
frankkerr at 2:48PM, Nov. 1, 2006
Why does it look like shes giving him a blow job or is it just cause im perverted. Only kidding it doesnt look like that... WHAT Im still perverted. Like your comic and thanks for your comments ill keep reading this.
eternalsnow at 5:14PM, Oct. 15, 2006
Kinda big but i still like the art.
mirudo at 3:48AM, Sept. 27, 2006
You do great work on expressions, especially the final panel, which is very well drawn and has good use of shadows, despite the lines being a bit shaky. The shaky lines is something that comes up a lot, and while it doesn't matter that much, especially when the images are so large it's quite easy to see. Perhaps try doing longer, smoother strokes with the pencil, pressing lighter and going over the line a few times to give definition rather than doing a single, hard shaky line? Just a suggestion. Something i've noticed that really should be commended is your use of panel layout and timing - even this early on you show great skill in organising the panels so the story flows well, and making speech bubbles that don't interfere with the art. Keep this up and your natural progression with the art will surely make this comic a winner. One final note for this page (man i ramble a lot, sorry) is that the hand in the first panel is a little off - they're always very hard to draw, so it's a good idea to try and find some kind of reference, even if it is just looking at your own hand and trying to copy that. (Trying to get the right pose with your hand can be awkward though, so a mirror and camera work wonders.)