Pg.2 Yes you do, Ki!
TrentTheFox on Aug. 15, 2010
I think she practiced that line.
This page is pretty much a little joke to myself (haha…) if you don't get it. The jist of it is I usually base my Sonic characters off of my Elemist Characters (Drawn Series). Trent notices I based his new look off of Key (and my new catch-phrase… yes, weird catch-phrase). Rina is one of my favorite characters that I've created, so why not turn her into a Sonic Character? The hair might be difficult, but hey :D!
Ettie at 7:45PM, Aug. 16, 2010
@TrentTheFox: Use a thicker border for panels. (and white one on dark backgrounds, black one for light backgrounds) My suggestion for improvement... based off what Shadow Dinosaur basically said.
TrentTheFox at 2:15PM, Aug. 16, 2010
@Ettie: Yes, mooohahaha! @Shadow Dinosaur: Yeah, i'll have to work on that. Now that I look at it you really can't read it all too well. Thanks for the advice :D
Shadow Dinosaur at 1:49PM, Aug. 16, 2010
Nice work on the Page. There are a few problems however. I offer my advice. 1. The text color black blends into the text boxes style you have chosen, also some of the text boxes blend into the background as well, those two reasons make the text hard to see. 2. Its hard to tell when one panel starts and another ends as the frame outline is quite thin. 3. The close ups in panel 3 and 4 are quite close so you can't really see what you are focusing on there. Fix up these problems and the comic will be even better. I hope my advice helps you.
Ettie at 1:41PM, Aug. 16, 2010
Nice page! They are sure foiled!