I think she can't believe that she's about to "die", I do. It's like "OMG. I'm gonna die." I agree with the crying and screaming though, I'm such a scaredy cat :P
i think you could have made the background much more interesting than this. and put more feeling into this page..
shes (for all we know) about to die.. and she only shes him calmly smiling.
hell, if that were me id be screaming and cryin a lot more than that. not to mention actualy memories would flash before my eyes...
This new version is good. It clears up a bit of some shadows the old one made. The prologue hints well such things which will help the reader to really enjoy the story and still doesn't tell much (at least I think so).
I must admit I were a bit surprised that you started it over again, but it was also great that you waited untill you had done the prologue before posting. That way you have showed us that it was a good thing you started over. Not that I wouldn't have minded if you had continued with the old version. However with this many pages you have proven that it was worth it to start over ^_^
Kasablanca at 7:30AM, March 19, 2007
I think she can't believe that she's about to "die", I do. It's like "OMG. I'm gonna die." I agree with the crying and screaming though, I'm such a scaredy cat :P
What A Life at 3:55AM, Feb. 12, 2007
@ mishi_hime: lol That's true. I'll have to re-do this page in the future. Thanks for the advice :)
mishi_hime at 3:00PM, Feb. 6, 2007
i think you could have made the background much more interesting than this. and put more feeling into this page.. shes (for all we know) about to die.. and she only shes him calmly smiling. hell, if that were me id be screaming and cryin a lot more than that. not to mention actualy memories would flash before my eyes...
poisen_ivy at 3:05AM, Feb. 5, 2007
its really cool so far
shany at 5:44AM, Feb. 3, 2007
The new version looks good so far! Can't wait to see more!
EmilyTheStrange at 3:15AM, Feb. 1, 2007
This is really nice, its very professional looking. :3
x_eko_x at 7:49PM, Jan. 30, 2007
This is different than the other comic! Nice work
winzrella at 10:39AM, Jan. 30, 2007
This new version is good. It clears up a bit of some shadows the old one made. The prologue hints well such things which will help the reader to really enjoy the story and still doesn't tell much (at least I think so). I must admit I were a bit surprised that you started it over again, but it was also great that you waited untill you had done the prologue before posting. That way you have showed us that it was a good thing you started over. Not that I wouldn't have minded if you had continued with the old version. However with this many pages you have proven that it was worth it to start over ^_^
kisugerpi at 10:21AM, Jan. 28, 2007
Dang it! I want more, more MORE!! *drops on floor and begs* MORE MORE MORE!! I really like if you haven't noticed! x3
anonymous at 11:08PM, Jan. 27, 2007
so is this why she got amesia(sp?)
S u g a r w a t e r at 10:00AM, Jan. 27, 2007
*emo emo tear tear*' poor little mashiko ;.;
thisberichard at 9:33AM, Jan. 27, 2007
Ooo. OK, I'm back and caught up. And I want more. It is teh pretty.
Rubygem at 2:01AM, Jan. 27, 2007
Your back YAY!i missed yah!^^
Storm at 10:59AM, Jan. 26, 2007
I want to see more! I love this version! *oohh, purty colors*
What A Life at 10:44PM, Jan. 23, 2007
yup, she was :)
Ihomaru at 9:30PM, Jan. 23, 2007
I really like this version it is all starting to make more sense now that I've seen this part but...why was she in a fight?
nerdsareinvading at 6:08PM, Jan. 23, 2007
aha! i think i understand the story now...
animegal12 at 5:21PM, Jan. 23, 2007
*gasp!!!* O.O what shall happen now?!?!
pyrofire123 at 4:00PM, Jan. 23, 2007
Really like what you got done here. :D
Rydel6 at 3:57PM, Jan. 23, 2007
Pretty water.
Brokenhill at 3:14PM, Jan. 23, 2007
GAH! MORE! I like this version!