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Dubiosity on June 23, 2009
Sorry, a somewhat lazy page. and I know the text seems…abrupt…I haven't really gotten the flow of the story going yet. XP
Harkovast: Thank you for teh five!And don't worry, I wasn't expecting a full critique, just wanted some feedback on what was working or wasn't workign for you as an audience. :) So thank you for that.
Idrawwithamouse: haha, it was deliberate. but I do suppose I could have reversed the gradient so that it was lighter on blindingly sunny…then turned dark on “no forewarning”..
Thank you for your feedback! []
This is all really helpful! And as promised…I'll be sure to take a look at your works! :D
IDrawWithAMouse at 6:30PM, June 24, 2009
Your art is great in a bunch of ways, but limited in others. Everyone has faults really. Yours is that everyone is drawn so stiff/ridged. Also, it would of been better if you mashed up panel 1 and panel 2 into one panel, since they're basically the same thing.