Good comic, funny, but the text bubbles need a bit more work. I understand that comics don't have to be the best art ever, but it still needs to be good.
This art is good, because it's supposed to be cartoony and it is. I recommend that you do comcis more lke this and maybe less frames and a bit bigger, but thats my oppinion.
Finally, the text bubbles ned more work. I can read them, but the text touches the bubbles and the spelling isn't that good. Plus listen to Rich and Lefarce, they are probably the best people not to get on the wrong side of. I don't know what they said so I can't say this wasn't bad.
(this is my longest ever comment. probably the most helpfull as well)
Of course, if you don't like what anyone has to say (even if they were legit comments), you have to admin review them. Clearly you are showing your maturity.
[quote]why do people even think i give a crap about my art?[/quote]
Because if it sucks, it makes the comic an eyesore that noone will want to look at, let alone read.
Ya know, it don't look real good when half your comments are marked for admin review.
And your comic doesn't look real good. You need to make the panels bigger or something, cause this page is cluttered to hell and back.
"U" is spelled "you"
"wat" is spelled "what"
"no" is spelled "know"
"commercialaism" is spelled "commercialism"
"stp" is spelled "stop".
This has been "Lefarce Teaches Typing".
I figure though, while I'm here, I should review this page.
The car in the last panel seems very small in comparison to the characters next to it. I'm going on a whim and guessing is a seperate panel from the one with the characters. However, with the lack of a gutter, I cannot tell. "Goodridins" is spelled wrong, as is many of the other words in this. I can't make the writing out due to these innacuracies. The "This panel is blank" section left me scrathing my head. Why would you bother making a panel if you aren't going to us it? It's breaking the fourth wall, and not in a good way. I can't be too mad about that though, I've done it from time to time.
Overall, this is better then your other updates. But it still lacks humor, grammar, writing, and order. It's chaotic, and difficult to read.
LOOKIS at 10:12AM, Jan. 9, 2010
I see no poblems with the dialogue. I could read every word. My only problem was trying to figure out what "A.E" meant.:P
Conned at 9:27AM, June 23, 2007
heheh the blank space..
DarthJJB at 3:52AM, Jan. 4, 2007
lolz
TEH Shadow at 7:05AM, Jan. 2, 2007
Good Trys Making comic can be quite hard escpeically *spelling wrong lol* if you are hand drawing them.
Cthulhu at 3:24PM, Nov. 7, 2006
lol,"lets try a fire station"Theyll probly try a police station next
Warspritecomic at 3:05AM, Oct. 23, 2006
Either way, listen to them. They may seem not-understanding or very violent, but they just want to help
qwerty at 5:51AM, Oct. 21, 2006
well if you hate funniness (you depressed emo) then go on messed up.
qwerty at 10:18AM, Oct. 15, 2006
yeah i know, im still a rookie (your a bit more understanding then lefarce or rich)
Warspritecomic at 7:18AM, Oct. 15, 2006
Good comic, funny, but the text bubbles need a bit more work. I understand that comics don't have to be the best art ever, but it still needs to be good. This art is good, because it's supposed to be cartoony and it is. I recommend that you do comcis more lke this and maybe less frames and a bit bigger, but thats my oppinion. Finally, the text bubbles ned more work. I can read them, but the text touches the bubbles and the spelling isn't that good. Plus listen to Rich and Lefarce, they are probably the best people not to get on the wrong side of. I don't know what they said so I can't say this wasn't bad. (this is my longest ever comment. probably the most helpfull as well)
Ninja_Jette at 1:15PM, Oct. 5, 2006
haha lol what a messed up robber XD art is messy and a bit small but hey! It's fun! XD
qwerty at 9:42AM, Oct. 4, 2006
wow goaway and leave me alone, even lefarce understands that
Rich at 11:16AM, Oct. 3, 2006
Of course, if you don't like what anyone has to say (even if they were legit comments), you have to admin review them. Clearly you are showing your maturity.
Rich at 8:56PM, Oct. 2, 2006
I don't really feel like it. Until you improve, I won't be going anywhere.
qwerty at 12:43PM, Oct. 2, 2006
wow didnt i say you should leave
Rich at 12:00PM, Oct. 2, 2006
[quote]why do people even think i give a crap about my art?[/quote] Because if it sucks, it makes the comic an eyesore that noone will want to look at, let alone read.
qwerty at 9:28AM, Oct. 1, 2006
why do people even think i give a crap about my art, anyone wants to rate my comics souly on how well they are drawn can leave.
qwerty at 1:08PM, Sept. 30, 2006
so wat the comic issupposed to be basic
Rich at 10:24AM, Sept. 29, 2006
Ya know, it don't look real good when half your comments are marked for admin review. And your comic doesn't look real good. You need to make the panels bigger or something, cause this page is cluttered to hell and back.
josif at 7:25AM, Sept. 27, 2006
heheh.
chaosflame24 at 1:28PM, Sept. 26, 2006
SPOON I FING HATE YOU! YAY! an update.
qwerty at 12:53PM, Sept. 26, 2006
its my comic and sik of ur mary twats coming on my page lefarce u smartass
lefarce at 11:32AM, Sept. 26, 2006
"U" is spelled "you" "wat" is spelled "what" "no" is spelled "know" "commercialaism" is spelled "commercialism" "stp" is spelled "stop". This has been "Lefarce Teaches Typing". I figure though, while I'm here, I should review this page. The car in the last panel seems very small in comparison to the characters next to it. I'm going on a whim and guessing is a seperate panel from the one with the characters. However, with the lack of a gutter, I cannot tell. "Goodridins" is spelled wrong, as is many of the other words in this. I can't make the writing out due to these innacuracies. The "This panel is blank" section left me scrathing my head. Why would you bother making a panel if you aren't going to us it? It's breaking the fourth wall, and not in a good way. I can't be too mad about that though, I've done it from time to time. Overall, this is better then your other updates. But it still lacks humor, grammar, writing, and order. It's chaotic, and difficult to read.
Drazi500 at 11:09AM, Sept. 26, 2006
I really doubt you can get lefarce banned. He could run comic rings round you.
hysellt at 9:39AM, Sept. 26, 2006
You should probably digitally ink this. In photoshop or something. A lot of this doesn't pop out. Nice though.