Christmas Story Page 13
skyangel on Nov. 21, 2012
I like fruitbat's suggestion of ‘history much better. I might have to sneak back and change it later on!;
I wasn’t at all happy with the scripting on these last two pages. I'd originally planned to stretch the action out too to show Sky taking a fair beating too along with some equally taunting and arrogant remarks from Richard to really get her blood up but time was pushing on and I ended up axing 2 pages to save time and rewriting the fight script. It reads awkwardly and doesn't flow well so I may well come back later on and redo the pages to the original script and the whole fight. I wanted her to have a bloody nose and a few bruises too at the end just like a proper superhero should have! Anyways, I think you get the general idea of the story.
tomorrow: Sarah's back with Nikki for one last thought before she awakes.
tommym at 11:52AM, Jan. 10, 2013
Dear Sky, Think page is great! No need to show prolonged battle. tommym
skyangel at 3:43PM, Jan. 9, 2013
Locoma: You sum this up very nicely for Liz (LV) Sarah could be seen as LV suggests to be doing herself some therapy but it seemed nicer to think that her concern for Stacey's future could be helped in this way. It is just all fantasy of course and Stacey's counselling will figure later on in part five so this is more an illustration of the sort of nightmare that might haunt her sleep.
skyangel at 3:39PM, Jan. 9, 2013
Liz: You write more deeply when you are tired than I do when I'm awake! ;)
skyangel at 3:39PM, Jan. 9, 2013
DV: tempted to have his goods removed as well in the same slice! lol
skyangel at 3:37PM, Jan. 9, 2013
Charliequin: In writing Nikki's storyline I have to stay aware that she has a male body and that to some people she will still be referred to in male terms especially when wearing male clothes again. I can't believe I missed that though as it is so blatantly bad of Sarah especially to refer to her as 'he'. I've amended that though now. :)
DarkVisor at 2:11AM, Jan. 9, 2013
It shows that, even in Dream, Sarah will do what she can, with what she has available to her, to help others
Locoma at 9:29PM, Jan. 8, 2013
Ohhh, I get it now. That was really nice of Sarah. When she embarked this "thing she had to do" I thought she was going to solve some problem of hers, not put her "dream" to solve someone else's trauma. Really nice.
Fruitbat_44 at 8:34AM, Jan. 8, 2013
Skyangel - very flattered you liked my suggestion. -blush- He definitely belong's to the dead past now. -g- And an Avenging Angel with wings as sharp as razors . . . -eg-
DarkVisor at 8:00AM, Jan. 8, 2013
Possibly a bit of both LV, but she most certainly _has_ 'dream-hopped' to Stacey to help. Why? Possibly just because she has "the power!!", but also because that's the sort of person she is (and she has done what she can for Stacey in the Waking World, this is just the final part for Stacey to 'heal')
Lunaris Victoria at 2:11AM, Jan. 8, 2013
Just have to wonder...is she really helping Stacie? Or is she, in a Lucid Dream, providing herself some therapy? Sort of acting in a manner to make herself feel better about the fact that, despite not knowing, she could not in any way help Stacie out. Face it, many of us have been there, where we find out someone near and dear to us had something horrendous happen to them...and what do we do? We console, we lend a hand, and, in our minds, we imagine...what if we could've been there? We might've made a difference! No, we -would- have made a difference! Superhero-style. Sarah has simply found a way to do that in her dreams now. Maybe she's dream-hopped to Stacie, maybe she's just working out her own feelings of inadequacy in the matter, or maybe...Nikki is at her desk, scripting Sarah out playing a hero in her own mind. I dunno...awesome stuff. XD Too late and tired to flesh that out more though. x.x ~Liz
Lopriest at 2:08AM, Jan. 8, 2013
Razor feathers?
DarkVisor at 9:18PM, Jan. 7, 2013
She knows Nikki is really a guy, she also knows that he created her as a comic-book character, she also knows she is currently dreaming and she doesn't want to know what would happen if Nick fell asleep before she 'woke up'
Dark Pascual at 7:45PM, Jan. 7, 2013
You have been watching "In the Mouth of Madness", haven't you?
charliequin at 7:00PM, Jan. 7, 2013
Is it weird that I'm more shocked that she slipped up and called Nicky a he?
Phantomduck at 6:47PM, Jan. 7, 2013
FATALITY, Skyangel wins.
DarkVisor at 3:30PM, Jan. 7, 2013
And conveniently (thank you for that, that's the last thing _anyone_ wants to see) covers his ugly bits. She also used her wing to slice his face 2 pages ago
KimLuster at 12:50PM, Jan. 7, 2013
Did... did she whack of his head with her wing!!! *CLAP CLAP*