Ok- here's my critique. I sprinkled a few tidbits over the pages as well.
Bottom line: 7/10
Humor: It has its good moments, but it isn't particularly brilliant. The filler is the best part, unfortunately. You have the gift of randomness, use it.
Plot: A little jagged with all the filler. Clever. The characters are distinct, but not quite as defined as to make it a high point.
Art: I'm not a fan of MS paint comics, frankly, among them yours is average exceptionally average. The spriting is acceptable, and portrays the animated character's emotions and persona. No problems here.
Tech: Get some. I don't know your financial situation, but I'd suggest picking up photoshop elements, or if you have it, powerpoint (it's more useful than you think.)
Updating Policy: Acceptable. Not awesome, but it works. No massive hiatuses as I saw. And yes, technology can be a bitch.
lemon_king at 4:20PM, March 13, 2008
Oooh! I have found someone with enough patience to read through all the pages!! YAY.
Naughtelos at 3:27PM, March 13, 2008
Ok- here's my critique. I sprinkled a few tidbits over the pages as well. Bottom line: 7/10 Humor: It has its good moments, but it isn't particularly brilliant. The filler is the best part, unfortunately. You have the gift of randomness, use it. Plot: A little jagged with all the filler. Clever. The characters are distinct, but not quite as defined as to make it a high point. Art: I'm not a fan of MS paint comics, frankly, among them yours is average exceptionally average. The spriting is acceptable, and portrays the animated character's emotions and persona. No problems here. Tech: Get some. I don't know your financial situation, but I'd suggest picking up photoshop elements, or if you have it, powerpoint (it's more useful than you think.) Updating Policy: Acceptable. Not awesome, but it works. No massive hiatuses as I saw. And yes, technology can be a bitch.