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Lightfoot on Aug. 9, 2019

I'm worried it sounds like I meant Delphi fought their dog…

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xailenrath at 9:13AM, Aug. 10, 2019

Weird. I can't reply to a reply. Anyway, @Lightfoot: Not that you're laying it on 'TOO thick' so much as grammatically(?) you're coming off a bit stilted. Some of your 'Thou's should be subbed out for a few "Thee"s. 'Thou' is generally used in context of "you" as the subject/object of a sentence in terms of that person initiating verbs or states of being, Whereas, "Thee" is used as they are applied TO the person in context of verbs beimg applied TO them. Does that make sense? (I may not be expressing myself correctly) The ancient speech has a few differing grammatical idiosyncracies. Like a lot of verbs will end in 'eth', 'est' or 'st', as well, as well as 'shall' and 'will' to frame(?) the verb. Ex: Above - "Thou harm those weaker than thou" should be "Thou harm'st those weaker than THEE". or "If thou can'st beat me, I leave thee alone. If I beat thee, thou shalt hear my words". I hope that didn't sound like a lot of mumbo-jumbo.

Lightfoot at 2:18AM, Aug. 16, 2019

I think I'm getting some of it, but I might not have been prepared enough to go with this kind of speech. Any kind of help would be welcome. I think I'd have more luck making her sound like Starfire from the Teen Titans cartoon. My original thought was that "you" should become "thou", and "your" should be "thine"-- although some of these pages were written in a hurry (as happens with webcomics sometimes when you're the artist and writer), and I've likely not always followed even that same plan. I suspect I'll have to go back and try to alter things.

xailenrath at 7:50AM, Aug. 9, 2019

The 'thou' is a bit out there. Still a solid page, though! :D

Lightfoot at 10:28PM, Aug. 9, 2019

Sometimes when I get a critique, they complain the people sound too similar. I thought Warhammer seems like a cross between Wonder Woman and Thor, so there was an obvious way to make her speak differently. Maybe I'm laying it on too thick?

MOrgan at 1:36AM, Aug. 9, 2019

Was the dog a boxer? ;-)

Lightfoot at 10:29PM, Aug. 9, 2019

I kind of think maybe it had powers.

342 "Fighting Grandma"

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