I think you're off to a fairly good start. I got a good giggle out of it. Your layout is well planned and it's very clear on what's going on.
A couple of suggestions. Don't be afraid of using a straight edge for your panels. Even if you want them to look hand drawn you can benefit by a few well drawn panels.
I don't think you need the "suddenly" text box when the sun comes out. You do a great job showing the sun coming out that it isn't necessary to spell it out.
For the dialogue, pick one and stick with it (bubbles or line). My suggestion would be to stay with the single line.
I hope you find my comments helpful and I look forward to seeing more.
LIFELINE COMICS at 3:09PM, Jan. 31, 2014
WOULD BE RIGHT AT HOME ON THE FUNNY PAGES MAYBE A MICRON PEN WOULD HELP
PBandJ at 1:02PM, Dec. 8, 2013
I think you're off to a fairly good start. I got a good giggle out of it. Your layout is well planned and it's very clear on what's going on. A couple of suggestions. Don't be afraid of using a straight edge for your panels. Even if you want them to look hand drawn you can benefit by a few well drawn panels. I don't think you need the "suddenly" text box when the sun comes out. You do a great job showing the sun coming out that it isn't necessary to spell it out. For the dialogue, pick one and stick with it (bubbles or line). My suggestion would be to stay with the single line. I hope you find my comments helpful and I look forward to seeing more.