Ok, let's hope you don't mute me this time.
This page looks like it was rushed. EXTREMELY rushed. So rushed that, it's not even a page!
You shouldn't do free paneling yet, especially if you're just a newbie. It takes practice and you're defintely not ready.
You need to practice your grammar and spelling. There is a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. "i hate climbing so bad, i want to jump off a clift."
"dang it morning its time to make a reascue teem and make some money"
It SHOULD be- "Dang, it's morning already? Better go eat breakfast and start a rescue team!"
You need to give this comic more of a "background". You can't just introduce a character out of nowhere saying that he wants to start a rescue team. Give the character some characteristics! What is he like? How does he interact with different people? Is he lazy or adventrous? Things like that.
Also, I know you want to make your comic "flashy" and "exciting", but putting a Pikachu right in the middle of a page ruins the whole page. It just doesn't make sense to do that.
You NEED to practice. Look over spelling and grammar, get better panels, and think more creative.
Sheesh, isn't Manego your brother? Why isn't HE helping you with this?
PKNESS at 7:13AM, Feb. 24, 2011
Ok, let's hope you don't mute me this time. This page looks like it was rushed. EXTREMELY rushed. So rushed that, it's not even a page! You shouldn't do free paneling yet, especially if you're just a newbie. It takes practice and you're defintely not ready. You need to practice your grammar and spelling. There is a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. "i hate climbing so bad, i want to jump off a clift." "dang it morning its time to make a reascue teem and make some money" It SHOULD be- "Dang, it's morning already? Better go eat breakfast and start a rescue team!" You need to give this comic more of a "background". You can't just introduce a character out of nowhere saying that he wants to start a rescue team. Give the character some characteristics! What is he like? How does he interact with different people? Is he lazy or adventrous? Things like that. Also, I know you want to make your comic "flashy" and "exciting", but putting a Pikachu right in the middle of a page ruins the whole page. It just doesn't make sense to do that. You NEED to practice. Look over spelling and grammar, get better panels, and think more creative. Sheesh, isn't Manego your brother? Why isn't HE helping you with this?