okay, i have to say, this comic is getting better. outline the panels in a different colour if you are doing black page backgrounds. i suggest blue. grammar could use some improvement, but the speech bubbles are better. instead of using customs all the time, just use some characters from the real games. i can't go on at you about spriting, mainly because i only do recolours, but this comic is getting better. this was a positive post by the way. i won't rate, because after all the stuff i just said, i don't actually know what to rate.
ok speach bubbles better good job.
story line i do not understain one thing about you comic. out of no were this guy wants the choas emeralds then you became a sayion and they want to kill you for it. a sword just came out of no were. a person spirts change for no reason. every one has the same motions and they all talk the same like they know what every one is going to say. i am sorry i am going to give it a 2 but you have improve a little
Ok, don't listen to most of the people who comment on your comic. Most of them are noobs to. I'll rate it fairly.
Sprites: 2
Your sprites are terrible. You also need to work on sprite placement, when someone is flying don't use the same sprite for every panel of flying.
Text Bubbles: 2
Aren't those pre-made? Never, I repeat Never, use pre-made text bubbles. When you put your text in them it doesn't look good.
Effects: 3
I'm guessing you don't have photoshop, or paint.net(Tell me if I am wrong) but you still need some cleaning up to do. I would offer to help, but I am currently on a hiatus(meaning I'm grounded) I will return in summer, if you still need my help I will offer it.
Plot: 1
It moves way to fast and I have no idea whats going on . I mean in your first issue you have someone who's teleported to a strange location, then without knowing the bunny girl he tells her he's a sayin? Don't make your character a sayin, it's way to overused and ruins the good name of Dragon Ball Z, just cause TonyTH does it, doesn't mean it makes you good. In fact Tony isn't even that good.
Overall Rating:2/5
That doesn't mean you can't improve, you just need to work hard and listen to crit. Oh and a little piece of advice, don't go asking around for cameos, if someone is good they won't want to be in a poor comic. If someone is a noob they will, you don't want noobs in your comic. So don't go out and ask random people, make friends and ask them. How do you think I get all the characters in my comic? They're my friends characters. Now please don't hate me, or flame me for this.
Ok, don't listen to most of the people who comment on your comic. Most of them are noobs to. I'll rate it fairly.
Sprites: 2
Your sprites are terrible. You also need to work on sprite placement, when someone is flying don't use the same sprite for every panel of flying.
Text Bubbles: 2
Aren't those pre-made? Never, I repeat Never, use pre-made text bubbles. When you put your text in them it doesn't look good.
Effects: 3
I'm guessing you don't have photoshop, or paint.net(Tell me if I am wrong) but you still need some cleaning up to do. I would offer to help, but I am currently on a hiatus(meaning I'm grounded) I will return in summer, if you still need my help I will offer it.
Plot: 1
It moves way to fast and I have no idea whats going on . I mean in your first issue you have someone who's teleported to a strange location, then without knowing the bunny girl he tells her he's a sayin? Don't make your character a sayin, it's way to overused and ruins the good name of Dragon Ball Z, just cause TonyTH does it, doesn't mean it makes you good. In fact Tony isn't even that good.
Overall Rating:2/5
That doesn't mean you can't improve, you just need to work hard and listen to crit. Oh and a little piece of advice, don't go asking around for cameos, if someone is good they won't want to be in a poor comic. If someone is a noob they will, you don't want noobs in your comic. So don't go out and ask random people, make friends and ask them. How do you think I get all the characters in my comic? They're my friends characters. Now please don't hate me, or flame me for this.
Dude, I'm probally gonna seem mean(Don't mean to be), but a lot of the sprites are outside the panels, the grammar is sorta bad, and the last 2 panels are way too close. I won't rate though. A little fine tuning and this will be a pretty good comic. Remember, I don't want to be mean, I just wanna help.
Nktakumi at 2:02PM, Aug. 16, 2007
Everybody have said the problems of this comic, so i just give you an rating.
Leon the Armadilldo at 11:18PM, June 14, 2007
ok man you have really got to start making comics!
Leon the Armadilldo at 3:31PM, June 6, 2007
WTF MAN!!!!! its been over a month! hurry up and update!
Dracora at 9:03AM, May 29, 2007
hey i read most of this its awsome can you seend me a keyblade weapon sheet if its possible?
derian555 at 8:14AM, May 29, 2007
Soon
Leon the Armadilldo at 1:33AM, May 29, 2007
man when is ur new comic coming out????
Zage at 5:37PM, May 23, 2007
Whats the story.......
dark link at 12:01PM, May 17, 2007
okay, i have to say, this comic is getting better. outline the panels in a different colour if you are doing black page backgrounds. i suggest blue. grammar could use some improvement, but the speech bubbles are better. instead of using customs all the time, just use some characters from the real games. i can't go on at you about spriting, mainly because i only do recolours, but this comic is getting better. this was a positive post by the way. i won't rate, because after all the stuff i just said, i don't actually know what to rate.
sonic2005 at 2:37PM, May 13, 2007
o i keep looking at this and help you if you need help but i just do not feel like camoing let. i send ice when it is the perfict time for him ok
sonic2005 at 2:36PM, May 13, 2007
ok speach bubbles better good job. story line i do not understain one thing about you comic. out of no were this guy wants the choas emeralds then you became a sayion and they want to kill you for it. a sword just came out of no were. a person spirts change for no reason. every one has the same motions and they all talk the same like they know what every one is going to say. i am sorry i am going to give it a 2 but you have improve a little
Smaza2 at 5:59PM, May 12, 2007
This is really random!!! yay
SqueakTW at 7:50AM, May 12, 2007
BTW sorry for the double post, totally my fault.
SqueakTW at 7:50AM, May 12, 2007
Ok, don't listen to most of the people who comment on your comic. Most of them are noobs to. I'll rate it fairly. Sprites: 2 Your sprites are terrible. You also need to work on sprite placement, when someone is flying don't use the same sprite for every panel of flying. Text Bubbles: 2 Aren't those pre-made? Never, I repeat Never, use pre-made text bubbles. When you put your text in them it doesn't look good. Effects: 3 I'm guessing you don't have photoshop, or paint.net(Tell me if I am wrong) but you still need some cleaning up to do. I would offer to help, but I am currently on a hiatus(meaning I'm grounded) I will return in summer, if you still need my help I will offer it. Plot: 1 It moves way to fast and I have no idea whats going on . I mean in your first issue you have someone who's teleported to a strange location, then without knowing the bunny girl he tells her he's a sayin? Don't make your character a sayin, it's way to overused and ruins the good name of Dragon Ball Z, just cause TonyTH does it, doesn't mean it makes you good. In fact Tony isn't even that good. Overall Rating:2/5 That doesn't mean you can't improve, you just need to work hard and listen to crit. Oh and a little piece of advice, don't go asking around for cameos, if someone is good they won't want to be in a poor comic. If someone is a noob they will, you don't want noobs in your comic. So don't go out and ask random people, make friends and ask them. How do you think I get all the characters in my comic? They're my friends characters. Now please don't hate me, or flame me for this.
SqueakTW at 7:50AM, May 12, 2007
Ok, don't listen to most of the people who comment on your comic. Most of them are noobs to. I'll rate it fairly. Sprites: 2 Your sprites are terrible. You also need to work on sprite placement, when someone is flying don't use the same sprite for every panel of flying. Text Bubbles: 2 Aren't those pre-made? Never, I repeat Never, use pre-made text bubbles. When you put your text in them it doesn't look good. Effects: 3 I'm guessing you don't have photoshop, or paint.net(Tell me if I am wrong) but you still need some cleaning up to do. I would offer to help, but I am currently on a hiatus(meaning I'm grounded) I will return in summer, if you still need my help I will offer it. Plot: 1 It moves way to fast and I have no idea whats going on . I mean in your first issue you have someone who's teleported to a strange location, then without knowing the bunny girl he tells her he's a sayin? Don't make your character a sayin, it's way to overused and ruins the good name of Dragon Ball Z, just cause TonyTH does it, doesn't mean it makes you good. In fact Tony isn't even that good. Overall Rating:2/5 That doesn't mean you can't improve, you just need to work hard and listen to crit. Oh and a little piece of advice, don't go asking around for cameos, if someone is good they won't want to be in a poor comic. If someone is a noob they will, you don't want noobs in your comic. So don't go out and ask random people, make friends and ask them. How do you think I get all the characters in my comic? They're my friends characters. Now please don't hate me, or flame me for this.
Zage at 2:29PM, May 10, 2007
woah..... pretty nice sprites
KingSkullkid at 6:57AM, May 9, 2007
Coward, don't go anonymous if you're going to insult someone, and since when is this your house.
KingSkullkid at 1:39PM, May 8, 2007
Dude, I'm probally gonna seem mean(Don't mean to be), but a lot of the sprites are outside the panels, the grammar is sorta bad, and the last 2 panels are way too close. I won't rate though. A little fine tuning and this will be a pretty good comic. Remember, I don't want to be mean, I just wanna help.