first of all... HURRAY! a critic.
second: yes i know the print is small sometimes, those are basically my characters saying things under their breath and is not meant to be read as part of the main plot (or lack there of).
also the 5th page explains that there is really no original content cause i mostly just wanted to get my art and ideas out there in a place others could veiw (and comment on... thanks :)
"original" is hard to do now days and eventually i hope to have some, but for now, i am happy with what i have and enjoy my own stuff more than anyone else prolly ever will.
this is not a flame but take it as you will.
and thanks for reading, you are my proof that at least someone is taking the time to look around.
Ok, just read all the pages. I have to say, you've got a defined art style that's a total joy to look at... However, it doesn't seem like you have a plot going... well you do... sorta'. The plot is that there is no plot. Unfortunately, this has been done so many times before. This type of fourth wall humor doesn't have a horse left to beat.
It seems as if though you jumped the gun and started a series with no thought. Just a character. A cool character, don't get me wrong.
My other little gripe is the text telling us what's going on. Trust me, your art is competent enough. I could easily tell what was happening without the extra text. It's a comic, not a script. We, the readers, should do as little work as possible whilst reading this. In all honesty, we don't have to in this case. But, you seem to think we do.
The text in those sections is really really small, and almost impossible to read. I would suggest just getting rid of em'.
Hope this helps.
insert title here at 4:36AM, Jan. 4, 2007
first of all... HURRAY! a critic. second: yes i know the print is small sometimes, those are basically my characters saying things under their breath and is not meant to be read as part of the main plot (or lack there of). also the 5th page explains that there is really no original content cause i mostly just wanted to get my art and ideas out there in a place others could veiw (and comment on... thanks :) "original" is hard to do now days and eventually i hope to have some, but for now, i am happy with what i have and enjoy my own stuff more than anyone else prolly ever will. this is not a flame but take it as you will. and thanks for reading, you are my proof that at least someone is taking the time to look around.
lefarce at 10:48PM, Jan. 3, 2007
Ok, just read all the pages. I have to say, you've got a defined art style that's a total joy to look at... However, it doesn't seem like you have a plot going... well you do... sorta'. The plot is that there is no plot. Unfortunately, this has been done so many times before. This type of fourth wall humor doesn't have a horse left to beat. It seems as if though you jumped the gun and started a series with no thought. Just a character. A cool character, don't get me wrong. My other little gripe is the text telling us what's going on. Trust me, your art is competent enough. I could easily tell what was happening without the extra text. It's a comic, not a script. We, the readers, should do as little work as possible whilst reading this. In all honesty, we don't have to in this case. But, you seem to think we do. The text in those sections is really really small, and almost impossible to read. I would suggest just getting rid of em'. Hope this helps.