Episode 6- A
Supersonic DBZ on Oct. 9, 2006
Before people comment. I have a few things to say. For one, this is a Sprite Adventure story that happens to be in comic form. Simple enough, right? Also for any of this to make sense, you have to read from the beginning of the series. If you comment and have suggestions put them in a friendly way so that I can take them into account. Also please rate the other pages in this series so that I can get an all around feedback on what to do. I got a few suggestions but I don't know where to take them. For one: I made this episode smaller than the others. This was a very hard task to do. Less space means less action and less dialouge. I can work around that but only if it's necessary. Another note: I am using MS paint and don't know the program too well. So take that into account. I am not one to complain actually, but in order to make this a good series. I need you help to do so. A bird can't fly on one wing and I can't make this better without feedback, so please and thank you.
theduckofanime at 10:24PM, Oct. 12, 2006
Kudos for taking crit well. That puts you above a lotta folks. [quote]hey theduckofanime can you kill the comic any more?[/quote] tygereyes: I could. I really could, but those are the main flaws, and all the comments were valid. I'm not out to "kill the comic" I'm out to see it improve. And with SSDBZ taking crit well, I'm sure it will.
Supersonic DBZ at 10:12PM, Oct. 12, 2006
Okay everyone, thanks for the critisism and comments. From what I see, the outstanding issue is the size. I'll gladly take care of that. Also there is the fact that too much is going on, I can slow that down too; it'll be more work for me but I can take it (even though story wise, It may take some time to slow things down.) As for the speech bubbles, that was an experiment I wanted to try... it was a failure. I guess I'll have to to use conventional bubbles from now on. As for the bit mixing, I think I am stuck to a degree. I don't want to take out certain characters, it depletes the purpose of having Sora and co. go to other areas in the first place. Besides as long as the setting and sprites of a world are not too mixed up, then I can pass it as part of the plot. Why? Because Sora and his buddies did not match too well on the world "Port Royal" in KH2. On the other hand, the example of the Paine pic is justified: I was desperate. I could not find an actual pixel image of her anywhere. But with the elimination of the experimental speech boxes, that should go away. Thanks to theduckofanime and tigereyes for the Praise and critique. When this comic can please the both of you, then we got ourselves a good quality sprite comic here.
Sweetpea at 4:52PM, Oct. 12, 2006
lol he got shoot thats so funny
jef dam5 at 9:27AM, Oct. 12, 2006
He can but he's nice now actually. For some reasons Duck posted i rate this well just read ok.
tigereyes at 5:42AM, Oct. 11, 2006
hey theduckofanime can you kill the comic any more?
tigereyes at 5:40AM, Oct. 11, 2006
this is really good. i love this comic! shot him 44 times. lol thats halarious! i give this comic a 5!
speedingbullet at 10:33PM, Oct. 10, 2006
ive did this before, and Ill do it once again: 8-O
theduckofanime at 10:30PM, Oct. 10, 2006
I know you've said read all your previous strips before commenting on this, but I can't. The pages are far too large, scroling makes it a pain in the rear. Average folks don't have desktops that are more than 1100 pixels, and this is about 1200, so half of it is just not visible. Second your word bubbles. Your cluttering up your pannels with these mini images of people representing who's talking. And the fact of the matter they don't stay in the same bit range (Paine for example looks very out of place). A tail pointing to them with a clear layout would be much more effective. Third, your bit mixing is quite apparant. Sonic does not fit into this in any way shape or form really. He messes up the look of your comic greatly. Fourth, you have an abundance of material, but you're bogging it down with the interdimensional things. You get points for trying a serrious plot, but your bogging it down by trying to do too much at one time.
lefarce at 10:01PM, Oct. 10, 2006
What in the world just happened?
nerdsareinvading at 6:25PM, Oct. 10, 2006
sizing issues........
Supersonic DBZ at 6:15PM, Oct. 10, 2006
by the way, I won't continue the series right away. I'm going to wait for some feedback. So check out my other series "Life with Sonic the Hedgehog"