Yo lay off him! he can't spell if im not there helping him, and he's my age! anyway, nice poster of my comic man! Now i'm really going to have to get back to updating daily!
So... a few things.
-The panels are way too big, and it's distracting from the joke. What I mean is that forcing me to scroll down the whole page just to read one sentence a panel is aggravating. The payoff just isn't big enough to leave me satisfied there.
-The backgrounds. Ok, you made them. Great job. You need to properly shade them, though. Y'know, give them a little texture. I want to say that there are a few tutorials out there on the bigger sprite sites about background making, so try to find them. But... ok, I'm going to be honest here: I don't even understand why you're putting 2d platform sprites into an isometric background. It just doesn't make sense to do that, because none of these characters have any dimensions besides left and right. Which brings me to my next point...
-The sprites barely move. I feel like I'm watching someone playing with nonposeable action figures, not sprites. The characters almost jump around from part of the set to the other, and the entire time they're just in their "standing" pose. It just looks awkward. Maybe you've solved this problem recently by making more sprites, but you should know this just in case.
-The humor really isn't my thing, but I can see that it might just be getting hampered by the delay of scrolling to get to each panel. So, whatever. You should try and tighten up the dialogue, though.
-This punchline isn't really doing it for me... because it really isn't a punchline. It feels like you got yourself into the 4th panel, and then realized that you needed to resolve it quick. So, at the least, I'd suggest a little more planning in the script area.
You definitely get points for making a conscious effort to control your spelling errors, (which I really respect) but you still have area for improvement.
gimmy a cup cake or i'll sue!!
Seph: fine heres youre cup cake
gimmy a soda or i'll sue
Seph fine heres youre soda
gimmy a *BOOM*
Seph: TRY SUEING ME NOW!!!!!
Vagabond at 1:46PM, May 17, 2007
... Did you even bother reading the post? I mean, for crying out loud... try checking out what you're trying to "defend" him from for once.
riku valentine at 1:23PM, May 17, 2007
Yo lay off him! he can't spell if im not there helping him, and he's my age! anyway, nice poster of my comic man! Now i'm really going to have to get back to updating daily!
Vagabond at 12:25PM, May 17, 2007
So... a few things. -The panels are way too big, and it's distracting from the joke. What I mean is that forcing me to scroll down the whole page just to read one sentence a panel is aggravating. The payoff just isn't big enough to leave me satisfied there. -The backgrounds. Ok, you made them. Great job. You need to properly shade them, though. Y'know, give them a little texture. I want to say that there are a few tutorials out there on the bigger sprite sites about background making, so try to find them. But... ok, I'm going to be honest here: I don't even understand why you're putting 2d platform sprites into an isometric background. It just doesn't make sense to do that, because none of these characters have any dimensions besides left and right. Which brings me to my next point... -The sprites barely move. I feel like I'm watching someone playing with nonposeable action figures, not sprites. The characters almost jump around from part of the set to the other, and the entire time they're just in their "standing" pose. It just looks awkward. Maybe you've solved this problem recently by making more sprites, but you should know this just in case. -The humor really isn't my thing, but I can see that it might just be getting hampered by the delay of scrolling to get to each panel. So, whatever. You should try and tighten up the dialogue, though. -This punchline isn't really doing it for me... because it really isn't a punchline. It feels like you got yourself into the 4th panel, and then realized that you needed to resolve it quick. So, at the least, I'd suggest a little more planning in the script area. You definitely get points for making a conscious effort to control your spelling errors, (which I really respect) but you still have area for improvement.
Jaden at 10:07AM, May 17, 2007
Oh if they do sue they can Hire Phoenix Right as there lawyer since he is best lawywe ever.
nighthawk41 at 8:15AM, May 17, 2007
Tifa's leg is cut off in the second panel and there shouldn't be that much empy space there.
vgman at 7:37AM, May 17, 2007
gimmy a cup cake or i'll sue!! Seph: fine heres youre cup cake gimmy a soda or i'll sue Seph fine heres youre soda gimmy a *BOOM* Seph: TRY SUEING ME NOW!!!!!