Honestly, her holy was so slow. Plus, what the eff is she doing alone! GOD! Her holy in dissidia wouldve been cool if it werent so slow and the enemy wouldve assist locked her by then
Amen. If the storyline wouldn't be so obscure, I would stop reading. That's what makes this comic attractive, the fact you actually have to get your mind together and think about the strip you just read to categorize what you just saw. Added, the Naruto chapter really didn't make any sense, but senseless slaughter can be really fun (Especially when it's Naruto characters being slaughtered)! And why should every character jabber about the background of his forces, or his past in general, at all? That's always the reason the bad guys lose, because they can't stop themselves from always talking about their plans. Kou however, at some parts, got a point, Max. A little little bit more focus would do it definetely, and some details precedent wouldn't hurt either. 'Cause if you wait for the plot to really kick in and give all the side info all at once, we're getting slain by details. Anything else. Keep it like that. You, in all manner, are a good author.
Kou and geth platform. Thanks for the analysis, and I can tell you, I do plan on the improvement but I think I should really explain my motives: The Naruto Slaughter:(Sure it was hate and malice), but I was having writers block then and I took it out on Naruto. Did I mention I hate Naruto? Seconf, as confusing as it is, it's supposed to be. I'm making various comics and jokes on random stories to make it funny as I come up with the main plotline. These are distractions, somewhat of a prelude entertainment to make sure the readers will think why the eff maxaxil keeps doing that. Maybe its far beyond comprehension and really bleak, but did you ever wonder who left Ballow there? You got the how he got the power part down, but i elaborated it in the form of a power tournament where Larxene had to give a sad background story for him. But dont worry, everything is nearly in place and thanks to your analysis, i think I can improve it better. Atleast it went so much better than HSOTD.
well finished reading this start to finish, left comments, this Geth Platform has finished it's analysis. You Started out alright with a character with a interesting power but you never explain how he gains his abilities. You Brought in Naruto Character for no reason other then to kill them for no real reason, i also feel they had no chance in their fight as none of them used their abilities other then Naruto's signature ability making it look like you the author merely wanted to brutally kill them out of malice, which makes for a bad plot. The Story has become confusing and immensely bipolar as i have no idea whats going on now. I Feel as though the comic could benefit from more focus and more details and less everyone murdering more people then the Protagonist of the Saint Row games. Ballow is also a mary sue, granted not the most horrible one, but a Mary Sue nonetheless. This is comic could be improved in a lot of areas, but if you could manage to improve it, you'd be good.
MeteorDropper at 12:36PM, Sept. 13, 2012
Oh, amen maester.. Hell, tell your friends before you go to cast a spell that takes days. They can defend you from maniacs.
SnowTheHedgehog at 7:12AM, Sept. 13, 2012
Amen. If the storyline wouldn't be so obscure, I would stop reading. That's what makes this comic attractive, the fact you actually have to get your mind together and think about the strip you just read to categorize what you just saw. Added, the Naruto chapter really didn't make any sense, but senseless slaughter can be really fun (Especially when it's Naruto characters being slaughtered)! And why should every character jabber about the background of his forces, or his past in general, at all? That's always the reason the bad guys lose, because they can't stop themselves from always talking about their plans. Kou however, at some parts, got a point, Max. A little little bit more focus would do it definetely, and some details precedent wouldn't hurt either. 'Cause if you wait for the plot to really kick in and give all the side info all at once, we're getting slain by details. Anything else. Keep it like that. You, in all manner, are a good author.
MaxAxil at 6:45AM, Sept. 13, 2012
Kou and geth platform. Thanks for the analysis, and I can tell you, I do plan on the improvement but I think I should really explain my motives: The Naruto Slaughter:(Sure it was hate and malice), but I was having writers block then and I took it out on Naruto. Did I mention I hate Naruto? Seconf, as confusing as it is, it's supposed to be. I'm making various comics and jokes on random stories to make it funny as I come up with the main plotline. These are distractions, somewhat of a prelude entertainment to make sure the readers will think why the eff maxaxil keeps doing that. Maybe its far beyond comprehension and really bleak, but did you ever wonder who left Ballow there? You got the how he got the power part down, but i elaborated it in the form of a power tournament where Larxene had to give a sad background story for him. But dont worry, everything is nearly in place and thanks to your analysis, i think I can improve it better. Atleast it went so much better than HSOTD.
Kou the Mad at 4:21AM, Sept. 13, 2012
well finished reading this start to finish, left comments, this Geth Platform has finished it's analysis. You Started out alright with a character with a interesting power but you never explain how he gains his abilities. You Brought in Naruto Character for no reason other then to kill them for no real reason, i also feel they had no chance in their fight as none of them used their abilities other then Naruto's signature ability making it look like you the author merely wanted to brutally kill them out of malice, which makes for a bad plot. The Story has become confusing and immensely bipolar as i have no idea whats going on now. I Feel as though the comic could benefit from more focus and more details and less everyone murdering more people then the Protagonist of the Saint Row games. Ballow is also a mary sue, granted not the most horrible one, but a Mary Sue nonetheless. This is comic could be improved in a lot of areas, but if you could manage to improve it, you'd be good.