-You need to have thicker panel-boundaries. 1-pixel-thin black lines isn't gonna do it. Make it 2 or 3 pixels thick.
-You need black outlines around your text boxes, preferably 2 pixels thick.
-You need the text in the text boxes to be properly aligned and centered, and not being too close to the edges.
-You need to use proper spelling, grammer, capitialization, etc., when typing dialouge.
-You need to capitilize names, even if they are multiple words. Like "Sir [b]C[/b]haos-[b]A[/b]lot" and "Shadow [b]C[/b]at".
-You need to do something about that title logo you've got at the top of the page. It's way too big, and has too much wasted space with just white as a background.
-You need to be canon to the NiGHTs series. For one thing, you keep spelling NiGHTs's name wrong. It's not "Nights", it's "NiGHTs". Secondly, NiGHTs is androgynous, and thus genderless, and thus is NOT female, despite his/her female voice actress for Journey of Dreams. Also, NiGHTs's personality is not like that. He/she's not a "dork", but if you REALLY want to make that personality change for your character, expect a lot of NiGHTs fans to hate your comic. A lot.
-You need text box tails on your text boxes leading to the character's mouth. A white line will not do.
-You should not be 9 years old and have a comic. Heck, if you're 9 years old, you should get off of Drunkduck and not come back, as this isn't the place for you. You will gain more wisdom and experience with age. Feel free to practice with sprite comics here to get better, but until a couple of years, don't expect any of your comics to be perfect, or to be popular.
-Your author character is merely a recolor of Emerl with a cat's tail. Work on designing him to be cooler and more original.
-Having an author character is generally frowned upon by experienced spriters, and is a cliche'd story element that is very overused, and not funny.
And lastly, and most importantly,
-You mustn't get frustrated, irritated, or angry with me, I beg of you. I am seriously trying to help you, as I've been a spriter for a long time, and I have improved a great deal with the help of critics. I hope you understand that by taking advice from critics like myself is the way to get more experienced, and have a better comic. I'm trying to help you, and I want to see this get better. I hope you take my advice, and I'll be back to help you again, as long as you don't mute or report my comment.
I hope you become a great spriter and comicker, and I want to help that goal become closer. Unfortunately, spriters usually get annoyed or mad when I try to help them. They think I'm "flaming" them, and they usually mute my comics. Those guys don't get better. I don't want you to be a n00b. So....take my help. It's free of charge.
Last page, you said, "If you hate my comic, tell me." So, I'll tell you. I hate your comic. A lot. Here's why, and I'll save an extra whole comment to explain, cause it's long.
wow the comic is great i love nights but one thing you should know nights doesnt have a gender but i guess nights is mostly considerd a girl anyway great comic
shadow cat at 3:09PM, Dec. 29, 2007
i know bluebot092, and your right,nights doesn't have a gender, but nights sounds,looks,and acts like a girl.
shadow cat at 9:03AM, Nov. 3, 2007
So smartspriter you hate it. you made me cry. I HEARFORTH BAN U FROM DIS COMIK!!!!!!!!!(just kidding)
SmartSpriter at 8:21AM, Aug. 26, 2007
I apologize for the extremely long comment.
SmartSpriter at 8:20AM, Aug. 26, 2007
-You need to have thicker panel-boundaries. 1-pixel-thin black lines isn't gonna do it. Make it 2 or 3 pixels thick. -You need black outlines around your text boxes, preferably 2 pixels thick. -You need the text in the text boxes to be properly aligned and centered, and not being too close to the edges. -You need to use proper spelling, grammer, capitialization, etc., when typing dialouge. -You need to capitilize names, even if they are multiple words. Like "Sir [b]C[/b]haos-[b]A[/b]lot" and "Shadow [b]C[/b]at". -You need to do something about that title logo you've got at the top of the page. It's way too big, and has too much wasted space with just white as a background. -You need to be canon to the NiGHTs series. For one thing, you keep spelling NiGHTs's name wrong. It's not "Nights", it's "NiGHTs". Secondly, NiGHTs is androgynous, and thus genderless, and thus is NOT female, despite his/her female voice actress for Journey of Dreams. Also, NiGHTs's personality is not like that. He/she's not a "dork", but if you REALLY want to make that personality change for your character, expect a lot of NiGHTs fans to hate your comic. A lot. -You need text box tails on your text boxes leading to the character's mouth. A white line will not do. -You should not be 9 years old and have a comic. Heck, if you're 9 years old, you should get off of Drunkduck and not come back, as this isn't the place for you. You will gain more wisdom and experience with age. Feel free to practice with sprite comics here to get better, but until a couple of years, don't expect any of your comics to be perfect, or to be popular. -Your author character is merely a recolor of Emerl with a cat's tail. Work on designing him to be cooler and more original. -Having an author character is generally frowned upon by experienced spriters, and is a cliche'd story element that is very overused, and not funny. And lastly, and most importantly, -You mustn't get frustrated, irritated, or angry with me, I beg of you. I am seriously trying to help you, as I've been a spriter for a long time, and I have improved a great deal with the help of critics. I hope you understand that by taking advice from critics like myself is the way to get more experienced, and have a better comic. I'm trying to help you, and I want to see this get better. I hope you take my advice, and I'll be back to help you again, as long as you don't mute or report my comment. I hope you become a great spriter and comicker, and I want to help that goal become closer. Unfortunately, spriters usually get annoyed or mad when I try to help them. They think I'm "flaming" them, and they usually mute my comics. Those guys don't get better. I don't want you to be a n00b. So....take my help. It's free of charge.
SmartSpriter at 8:08AM, Aug. 26, 2007
Last page, you said, "If you hate my comic, tell me." So, I'll tell you. I hate your comic. A lot. Here's why, and I'll save an extra whole comment to explain, cause it's long.
bluebot092 at 10:31PM, July 4, 2007
wow the comic is great i love nights but one thing you should know nights doesnt have a gender but i guess nights is mostly considerd a girl anyway great comic