i know the first page was posted yesterday but i thought you need to see both pages togeather. the lay out on the second page seems to work well. he falls and that draws the eye to the narration at the bottom of the page and sc flying back up leeds you back to the top for the next pannel. is this the best comic in the world? probably not but i think it's light years beyond any thing i did with the villain next door, the platypus, the kawala, etc, etc. i'm no writer but i think the writing is better and the art is a lot different than most of the stuff out there in print or on the web. with the girlfriend plot done with i think you can see more of the comedy coming back into the story.