battery 2-4
Matchhead1984 on Dec. 3, 2007
Just edited the last two pages. The word placement in storytelling is very important. It creates the timing and how the panel will be looked at. Stan Lee said that he spent more time figuring out where to place the words than writing them.
This part of the story was written by my brother with interpretation by me ( I was writing it down and editing.) Please comment on the storytelling, if the two stories intergrate fine and also the overall feel of it. Thanks
Matchhead1984 at 3:20PM, Dec. 4, 2007
I agree. Thanks for the input. I will make that change and repost!
QSAMA at 11:15AM, Dec. 4, 2007
so far they intergrate pretty well and the overall feel seems good one thing though in the last text box it would probably flow better if worded: "war not only affects those who die, but also those who go on living." hope that helps keep up the good work!
polo at 8:45AM, Dec. 4, 2007
This is nicly done page! The lineart and coloring! Well done once more!