...I don't see a punch line. Further I think you should just introduce them as they come along rather than like this, I can tell from your style that you're starting off, but please, please work on it. Never think that you're finished improving. further, these "cut and paste sprites are really, really inneffective. it looks quite frankly like you just have no creativity. THis comic shows little to no work. I'm sorry, but I can't give this anything but a two, and only because you're, once again just beggining.
Vagabond:
1)This is the introduction of my cast (or main cast)
2)F*CK! I had him blue! And this is one of my first Frankenstiens, so expect it akward.
3)I am still working on those sprites for him...I am not good at modifying mouths and can not find a sprite sheet of Bass talking.
4)I would add action to it, but as before, I am working on his sprite sheet.
5)I actually did plan to have him stomp his foot in the 2nd and 3rd panel but did not have any sprite sheets...
1)You've started every comic with a "I'm so-and-so" comment. It's really bad writing.
2) That's a really odd looking Frankenstein. I'm seeing Bass's head, Storm Eagle's wings, Freeze Man's body, and maybe Spring Man's blaster. Either way, it looks really... awkward.
3) Its mouth isn't open when it talks.
4) You just copied and pasted the same panel 3 times. Don't you think that's a little lazy?
This comic needs a lotta work.
FNLugan at 7:32AM, Aug. 8, 2006
Oh hey, a sprite comic. And a line ripped from the Simpsons...
The mediocre one at 4:07PM, Aug. 3, 2006
...I don't see a punch line. Further I think you should just introduce them as they come along rather than like this, I can tell from your style that you're starting off, but please, please work on it. Never think that you're finished improving. further, these "cut and paste sprites are really, really inneffective. it looks quite frankly like you just have no creativity. THis comic shows little to no work. I'm sorry, but I can't give this anything but a two, and only because you're, once again just beggining.
Deathmonk666 at 5:51AM, July 18, 2006
Vagabond: 1)This is the introduction of my cast (or main cast) 2)F*CK! I had him blue! And this is one of my first Frankenstiens, so expect it akward. 3)I am still working on those sprites for him...I am not good at modifying mouths and can not find a sprite sheet of Bass talking. 4)I would add action to it, but as before, I am working on his sprite sheet. 5)I actually did plan to have him stomp his foot in the 2nd and 3rd panel but did not have any sprite sheets...
Vagabond at 6:15PM, July 17, 2006
1)You've started every comic with a "I'm so-and-so" comment. It's really bad writing. 2) That's a really odd looking Frankenstein. I'm seeing Bass's head, Storm Eagle's wings, Freeze Man's body, and maybe Spring Man's blaster. Either way, it looks really... awkward. 3) Its mouth isn't open when it talks. 4) You just copied and pasted the same panel 3 times. Don't you think that's a little lazy? This comic needs a lotta work.