I thiink the art needs a bit of work. Do you scan this in and edit in MS Paint? There is nothing wrong with it if you do, but you really should clean it up a bit more. Your panel lines are crooked, and leak into the other panels.
I've seen worse. My only concern is panel 5 - for that many !s, he doesn't look very angry, loud or for that matter, anything past apathetically bored. XD
anonymous at 10:35AM, July 22, 2006
I thiink the art needs a bit of work. Do you scan this in and edit in MS Paint? There is nothing wrong with it if you do, but you really should clean it up a bit more. Your panel lines are crooked, and leak into the other panels.
Cyberlink at 12:07PM, July 21, 2006
thats a good point, expressions would help
Mort at 10:04AM, July 20, 2006
I've seen worse. My only concern is panel 5 - for that many !s, he doesn't look very angry, loud or for that matter, anything past apathetically bored. XD