Page 4: We gon' sip Bacardi...
TheMidge28 on April 12, 2009
Thanks to all of you still reading and commenting.
I appreciate it so much.
I hope this isn't dragging for anyone.
this is going somewhere. :)
And I hope you enjoy where its going.
Hang tight more stuff coming and new update next Monday.
I am using the song In Da Club by 50 Cent for a reason and thought the songs lyrics were fitting for each page kind of like a theme for each.
So please let me know what you think and please don't be afraid of being critical.
I am not one for getting upset over criticism.
I prefer balanced honest crit.
An artist will not improve without it.
See ya next Monday and I have replied to previous comments.
Thanks again!
Replies to everyone on pacing:
Thank you so much for everyone's comments in regards to the pacing.
Everyone's input is appreciated greatly and I wish I could post more pages regularly instead of once a week. but I also don't want to burn through my buffer. Now with that said, onto individual replies…
Bocaj: Do you like these pages better than the old?
Nepath: Thank you, sir. :)
harryq: Shut your mouth! if you dare stop posting your comic I will hunt you down and give you an atomic wedgie… and a hug because I like you! if you stopped posting your work which has been and inspiration and encouragement to me it would be a true disappointment.
nyj: Thanks for the compliment and encouragement.
Mr.Hades: thanks for the tip. I will check that site out. :)
Doctor Shadow: Thanks so much for saying so! :)
Repoman: I am so glad the atmosphere is captured because with doing a horror comic as this atmosphere to me is like another character in the story.
Loud G: You have heard of tramp stamps, right? Given any night in a club and you will find dozens of these said items. You might also collect them as one would collect Pokemon cards. ;)
crocty: Bartenders are schmoozers. They schmooze and schmooze for that extra tip! That's what I was trying to communicate here.
Ryu: Ditto crocty's reply. there wasn't any intention that the smiling bartender was evil. but adds to the atmosphere of sorts.
ttyler: glad to know it read well for film because apart from comics film is my biggest influence.
DAJB: I concur. My intention is more lent towards a graphic novel with many chapters. So I glad the pacing works well in that format.
darkwaterfrey: I can see what you mean but last time I was in club it takes forever and a day to get drink whether you hold up finger or cleavage. But I definitely understand and appreciate your crit.
armandoB: Thanks! Ditto Repoman's reply.
der vossi: thanks for the support…
trevoramueller: and to you as well!
dgriff13: Thanks for the support. I think its the space between updates actually. Good to know people who do feel its slow may mean they want more or the next page now not later. :)
cs3ink: No truer words ever said. But I do appreciate what others think. Not to say I will change on account of it. But I want to be open to it for perspective purposes.
starwolf and jgib99: Thanks for the support as well! :)
therealtj: What are you jabbering about?! I have no idea what you are… holy crap it is him!
Rori: Thanks for the input. a catch-22 of sorts, I guess.
roycemarie: Enjoy the whiskey! I have no use for Bicardi either! :)
Thanks everone! I much appreciate your insight and perspective on pacing.
roycemarie at 5:38PM, April 15, 2009
I agree with what DAJB said! Except for the Bicardi...I'd rather a good sipping whiskey!
Rori at 11:22PM, April 14, 2009
I gotta agree with harryq, I think the _perception_ of slowness comes with the book territory. It would be nice if one could upload several pages at a time, even a chapter, but then that would cut into readership, or at least, potential readership. Anyway, I like what's going on so far.
therealtj at 4:25PM, April 14, 2009
Oh crap, it's him it's him it's him, leaning on the bar, it's him it's him it's him!
cs3ink at 6:12PM, April 13, 2009
I sure as hell can't comment on the pacing. Broken's slower than all hell. And you're doing this for you, as I'm doing my book for me. You'll never satisfy everyone. Satisfy yourself. If everyone else loves your book, but it's not what you want it to be, what's the point? Do your thing. Screw everyone else.
dgriff13 at 2:55PM, April 13, 2009
yeah, not sure if it just feels slow, or if it's just the space in between updates (not that it's your fault, of course)... but the story does seem to be progressing slowly. Still enjoy your work! Totally get the sense of atmosphere ... I have a headache already, lol
armandoB at 12:26PM, April 13, 2009
DAJB makes a good point. Also, I like the mood. It makes me feel like i'm at a club. I'll also echo what others have said about Penciljack.com and Conceptart.org, Both sites helped me improve a lot. Can't wait for the next page.
darkwaterfrey at 10:38AM, April 13, 2009
Lovely work. I think the colors work well. I'm sorta wishing that the girl should look like she's trying to talk to the bartender (either leaning in more and/or her mouth open) --only since the music is loud and the bartender isn't looking twords her at all. Her finger just up in the air, while the bar guy looks away doen't sell it to me. Other than that small detail, everything really works well!
DAJB at 10:08AM, April 13, 2009
I don't have a problem with the pacing. Contrary to some here, I think I'd find the pace [i]more[/i] of a problem if this were a print comic. It'd be fine as a full length graphic novel but, if published in pamphlet form with, say, 20-30 pages per issue, there'd be [i]a lot[/i] of the first issue with very little plot development. Not so good if people have had to pay for those 20+ pages! A graphic novel doesn't have that problem because the pacing of the [i]whole[/i] story is what counts. And a webcomic doesn't have that problem because, being free, the reader is prepared to wait a lot longer to see where the creator is taking him/her. In short ... this works fine for me - keep it coming!
ttyler at 8:43AM, April 13, 2009
I'm reading this comic, as if it were a film. In that light, it's paced just fine for my tastes. Good stuff!!
Ryuthehedgewolf at 7:44AM, April 13, 2009
I hate how the guy is smiling. It creeps me out. But the comic is coming along fine.
crocty at 5:04AM, April 13, 2009
:o That bloke looks happy. A bit [i]too[/i] happy if you ask me. What's he got to be happy about? >:( I don't trust him. Not for an instant.
Loud_G at 4:13AM, April 13, 2009
hmm....hot pink tattoo? Could she be more than a simple victim-to-be?
repoman at 3:23AM, April 13, 2009
Another page the exudes atmosphere - I get the impression that everything is pumped up too loud. And I'll second PencilJack if you want some crits on your stuff.
Doctor Shadow at 3:09AM, April 13, 2009
Gorgeous page Midge.
MrHades at 2:03AM, April 13, 2009
If you are looking for artistic feedback, I would suggest posting your work up at Conceptart.org or Penciljack.
MrHades at 2:03AM, April 13, 2009
If you are looking for artistic feedback, I would suggest posting your work up at Conceptart.org or Penciljack.
n_y_japlander at 1:40AM, April 13, 2009
Perrrrrrdy!!!! The pacing looks just fine from where I am!!! Like Bocaj said, for those who think the pace is slow, press the "first page" button, and read at your own pace, it will come out just fine!
harryq at 1:22AM, April 13, 2009
Liking it very much, There is a problem with the presentation of comic book type stories as opposed to strip type comics in webcomics. I personally feel that there is a perception of slow development in comics like this and mine. That's why I'm leaning toward pulling mine out of this type of presentation, probably when I finish the current storyline.
Bocaj at 10:19PM, April 12, 2009
It is going a tad slow, just because we have to wait between pages, instead of like a normal comic book, but even though not much plot development has occurred, each page is still very beautiful.