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Deme and Dray childhood flashback
NPC_Girl at 3:19AM, Aug. 13, 2007
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to put you're thoughts on this small 15 page mini story and help me improve in the future! what did you like? what did you dislike? how can i improve it in future? did the characters have enough depth? was the writing okay? or did i lose the plot with that now and then? would it have been better not to do it at all? out of 1-10 how would you rate the entire story overall? how does this story make you feel towards Deme and more importantly Dray? does it make you like Dray ect? anything would be helpful people ^_^
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VIPER0204 at 12:17PM, Aug. 13, 2007
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I rather liked it…It sorta hinted to why Dray and Deme start fighting…I guess if anything you could have made it more clear as to why they would be fighting…I give it an 8…..good story telling but it really did kinda stray from what was going on around the comic in present day….
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