Here's my suggestions:
- you should update 1 time a day. Too many updates in one time will confuse readers, unless you announce in your authors notes you will update more than once.
-I see improvement which is good. Keep up the good work. I wish I could have seen a little more dialouge in this page. Movement was excellent! Nice job with the movement this time.
Ettie at 5:28PM, July 31, 2010
Here's my suggestions: - you should update 1 time a day. Too many updates in one time will confuse readers, unless you announce in your authors notes you will update more than once. -I see improvement which is good. Keep up the good work. I wish I could have seen a little more dialouge in this page. Movement was excellent! Nice job with the movement this time.