Chapter 1 End
jkgaughan on Oct. 31, 2018
Hi Guy's
Next chapter may take a while to come out, as I am only doing this in my spare time. when the whole chapter is finished I will upload.
in the meantime, this is a bit of a character sheet for the characters introduced so far. (with both their “forms”)
BustyLaroo at 8:06AM, Nov. 27, 2018
Read through what you have so far. It's very entertaining. You have your own style, which is always awesome. And I love how most of the characters just have a "eh whatever" attitude about all the fantastical things happening, it adds a lot of humor. I would work a bit at the pacing. Sometimes it seems to jump around a bit and it can be a little tricky to make sense of what just happened. Don't be afraid to have some panels without text, it can help emphasize dramatic and/or humorous moments. Otherwise, I see a lot of potential! :)
jkgaughan at 5:55PM, Dec. 2, 2018
Thanks a lot for the feedback. I will try to work on Pacing a little more in the next chapter. And I get where you are coming from in terms of the panels without text. Thank you so much for the feedback.
JaymonRising at 9:53PM, Nov. 25, 2018
All right, I read through it. It's a competently made and well colored/shaded comic. My only gripes, I guess, would have to be the lack of motion (like in page 17) unless you were to add blur or lines across the panels. I'd also lower the opacity on the word bubbles so the words don't intermix with the background. But that's as far as I can go in terms of even the smallest nitpick, this comic is fairly good already and looks like it's getting there. ^^
jkgaughan at 5:58PM, Dec. 2, 2018
Thanks for the feedback. Lack of motion isn’t something I had thought about before so thanks for bringing that to my attention. Will try to incorporate that into the next chapter, and text bubbles in next chapter will definitely have less opacity. thanks for the comment.