I like the idea of your story, and it's quite a good start. It starts seeminly in the midst of action and seems to be ready to show off your character's abilities or quirks and then ...there is a sudden skip with no warning. I was loving this until the third page, and she was suddenly shopping on the fourth. You need a transisition page here ...like page 1 that say chapter 1. It would be a perfect fit on page 4. Otherwise, this is good comic.
Lunarsun at 11:20AM, May 29, 2020
I like the idea of your story, and it's quite a good start. It starts seeminly in the midst of action and seems to be ready to show off your character's abilities or quirks and then ...there is a sudden skip with no warning. I was loving this until the third page, and she was suddenly shopping on the fourth. You need a transisition page here ...like page 1 that say chapter 1. It would be a perfect fit on page 4. Otherwise, this is good comic.
bonh at 4:18PM, May 29, 2020
thanks for the feedback! ill go change it