Chapter 1: Page 4
KamiDaHobo on July 28, 2007
So, we finally have a name for our “main” character: David Avalon.
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This was a tough page, for a few reasons.
From a narrative perspective, how do you make general dialogue interesting? I tried to be a bit dynamic with the last panel, simply for that reason.
From a personal standpoint, I'm still trying to find a style that's simple, effective, but most importantly, interesting to look at. This page is a bit more ‘line heavy’ than the previous, and I'm not sure how I enjoy it. It makes the pages easier to make, sure, but I'm wondering how you all feel about it.
Definitely let me know, as I'm in a state of confusion about it. Also, having exposed nerve endings in my tooth (and not having insurance to go to the dentist) isn't a good thing to have while creating a page of a comic. :P
Thanks for reading my long rant, I'll see you all on the 5th of August!
EmilyTheStrange at 8:35AM, Aug. 4, 2007
Wow, I love how this style is kind of.. wet paint-like. It really stands out. Keep it up!
VegaX at 1:37PM, July 29, 2007
I think you managed to get a very good flow in the dialogue, and very nice perspective shot in the last panel.
I heart artists at 11:26AM, July 29, 2007
Gritty and well written! I want to see more!
D0m at 6:27AM, July 29, 2007
Try out as many styles as you want. It's gonna look great, I think. With Nadya, I try and make the dialogue interesting my incorporating a lot of facial expressions that has the reader piecing together how the characters feel at any point in time.
Imagine at 4:29AM, July 29, 2007
my printer's name is also xerox! gasp!
Peipei at 1:40AM, July 29, 2007
I really like your style :3