drunk ducky121 at 4:10PM, Aug. 2, 2010

and the ramen noodles was just another one of my horrible jokes it wasnt to be taken seriously

drunk ducky121 at 4:09PM, Aug. 2, 2010

this comic is supposed to be a cliffhanger to reveal everything else as the comic develops isnt that exactly how the original dragon ball started out

Ettie at 3:42PM, Aug. 2, 2010

Better grammer than last comic. I'm glad you're taking my comments seriously, but you need to proofread a little bit more. Proofreading Comments: +.5/1 "now Game On!" = Now needs to be capitalized "weird aura that I feel like ive" = I've, I should still be capitalize, and you need apostraphe ve. I've Ramen, over the boundaries of the text bubble... "here i come" I needs to be capitalized. Need punctuation at the ends of your sentences. Various times missing puncatuation appears. Need to capitalize names. Vegeta should have been capitalized since it is a name. ------------------------------- Plot Comments: +.5/1 Besides being a tournament, I really do not get the story. Ok, so Goku wants Ramen noodles if he wins? If he is hungry, shouldn't that make it harder for him to fight? These characters, they seem immortal and two dimensional personalities right now, unpurposefully. ----------------------------- Effects Comments: +1/1 The effects are pretty good, but they could still use work. I do like the effects text. If you tried zooming in on panels, your comic would look better, but that will also create resizing issues. -------------------------- Paneling +0/1 The paneling for this comic is really bad. You need to use thicker and darker borders on a light background. You need to make sure your comics panels are even. It is not pleasing to look carefully at the panels, but you need to work on this area. --------------------------------------- Movement comments: +1/1 Movement is ok, a little choppy, but it should improve the more you sprite. Total: 3/5