Energize #1 - Page 17 Latest update. Thanks to all who commented on the previous page, i have responded to all. Thanks for reading and i hope you enjoy the new page.
Damn, shes gotten herself in a pickle...and I'm not talking about the fire! Where are the fathers, huh? Yeah, that's right, PLURAL. XDD
I kid, great page!
@Stabby Team USA, MEDUSA, Starwolf, doomedd44, man in black, literacysuks1, lurch9944, timlight, Dchao, Vindibudd, Talekyn, ozone ocean, steve_sloan, TheMidge28, Beautiful_Flames:
Thanks for all the comments
@Inlad:
Not a problem
AHA! that would make some sence *curses own short sightedness* just so ya know, this is all supposed to be constructive criticism.
Inlad the Dashing Paladin.
@fitz / Inlad:
(Attempting to defend myself) My initial thoughts were that the children would be frightened but not aware enough of what danger they are really in, and the mother is taying focused and strong for her children...
...however...
I admit that i followed the 'glossy' trend of this comic too far in the last panel. I appreciate these things being pointed out so that i can make it better.
I have to agree with Inlad here, the last panel looks too "clean". The kids look scared, but the lady doesn't, she's almost like "hello there". Also, I would imagine them either obscured by the smoke or decrease the saturation significantly, because the way it is, the wall of smoke looks kind of like wallpaper. They should be choking or coughing, too. But other than that, great job, as always :) The third panel is my favorite. Also, thanks for checking out my stuff - and always replying to my comments on your comic. Not everyone does that, so I appreciate it.
This page seems to be very well done. I got a bit of a chuckle out of Energize's comment about the fire. My only critic is that the people don't look quite scared enough (plz don't hate me!) maybe this is connected to the plot somehow, and I'm just to short sighted to notice.
Inlad The Dashing Paladin.
Heh, being number one on the site is Temporary! ^_^
Amy of Charby is better for that honour since she's been at number one for months and months, it's only been two weeks for me.
Jeez. That poor woman and her kids! But if he can stop a falling re-entry vehicle, he can probably save all of them ^_^
SympleSymon at 6:36PM, Dec. 19, 2007
Damn, shes gotten herself in a pickle...and I'm not talking about the fire! Where are the fathers, huh? Yeah, that's right, PLURAL. XDD I kid, great page!
Nepath at 12:41PM, Aug. 2, 2007
@Stabby Team USA, MEDUSA, Starwolf, doomedd44, man in black, literacysuks1, lurch9944, timlight, Dchao, Vindibudd, Talekyn, ozone ocean, steve_sloan, TheMidge28, Beautiful_Flames: Thanks for all the comments @Inlad: Not a problem
Stabby Team USA at 12:17PM, Aug. 2, 2007
And then there were childrens...hundreds of them..
MEDUSA at 7:54AM, Aug. 1, 2007
YES ITS OFFICIAL IM AN ENERGIZE GEEK NEPATH...JUS ASK UR BRO...
lurch9944 at 1:38PM, July 28, 2007
Nicely done yet again.
Inlad at 5:16PM, July 27, 2007
AHA! that would make some sence *curses own short sightedness* just so ya know, this is all supposed to be constructive criticism. Inlad the Dashing Paladin.
Nepath at 8:23AM, July 27, 2007
@fitz / Inlad: (Attempting to defend myself) My initial thoughts were that the children would be frightened but not aware enough of what danger they are really in, and the mother is taying focused and strong for her children... ...however... I admit that i followed the 'glossy' trend of this comic too far in the last panel. I appreciate these things being pointed out so that i can make it better.
Fitz at 8:04AM, July 27, 2007
I have to agree with Inlad here, the last panel looks too "clean". The kids look scared, but the lady doesn't, she's almost like "hello there". Also, I would imagine them either obscured by the smoke or decrease the saturation significantly, because the way it is, the wall of smoke looks kind of like wallpaper. They should be choking or coughing, too. But other than that, great job, as always :) The third panel is my favorite. Also, thanks for checking out my stuff - and always replying to my comments on your comic. Not everyone does that, so I appreciate it.
timlight at 8:30PM, July 26, 2007
go go go! energize! ^^
Dchao at 8:06PM, July 26, 2007
O.O to..many..kids. Good page keep 'um coming.
Vindibudd at 7:02PM, July 26, 2007
wonderous!
Inlad at 6:36PM, July 26, 2007
This page seems to be very well done. I got a bit of a chuckle out of Energize's comment about the fire. My only critic is that the people don't look quite scared enough (plz don't hate me!) maybe this is connected to the plot somehow, and I'm just to short sighted to notice. Inlad The Dashing Paladin.
Talekyn at 6:30PM, July 26, 2007
Didn't see that coming! Nice pacing and layout.
Ozoneocean at 5:36PM, July 26, 2007
Heh, being number one on the site is Temporary! ^_^ Amy of Charby is better for that honour since she's been at number one for months and months, it's only been two weeks for me. Jeez. That poor woman and her kids! But if he can stop a falling re-entry vehicle, he can probably save all of them ^_^
steve_sloan at 5:05PM, July 26, 2007
Great page. I love the last two panels. Keep 'em coming!
TheMidge28 at 4:15PM, July 26, 2007
Great page and dialogue
Beautiful_Flames at 2:20PM, July 26, 2007
Wow... she was busy