Even with the question mark, this ending seems a bit too happy for the husband. He killed for his second chance too see his wife and even though he died, he still gets to be with his wife. In a twisted way, it's a reward.
Still... can't bare myself from giving this anything under a 5.
And the rhyming did improve.
Oh, that's a great story, I love it! And anyone who can narrate in poetry well is a talented writer in my book! Five stars so far! I'm eager to read more!
Here in appreciation I stand and clap, as this story's wings had to flap.
The enjoyment in reading this story, it is something from you got a glory!
this story is great! *Claps*
Hubby says you'd give Creepshow a run for its money here!
Excellent art, the story arc was appropriately creepy.
The prose got hard to read through at time, but it fit the style of the story. Well done Vega!
Your rhymes for the comic have greatly improved since the beginning, and I just love the art. It reminds me of creep show (I know the movie is cheesy, but the style of art is still pretty similar.)
The Tourist at 12:20PM, July 28, 2018
Out standing
Product Placement at 9:26PM, April 25, 2010
Even with the question mark, this ending seems a bit too happy for the husband. He killed for his second chance too see his wife and even though he died, he still gets to be with his wife. In a twisted way, it's a reward. Still... can't bare myself from giving this anything under a 5. And the rhyming did improve.
Genejoke at 1:44AM, April 17, 2010
very good, I have a desire to do something a bit like this, but so far I have not the ideas. Stilla brilliant start, favourite it is.
Masq at 9:23PM, Aug. 29, 2007
Oh, that's a great story, I love it! And anyone who can narrate in poetry well is a talented writer in my book! Five stars so far! I'm eager to read more!
TheMidge28 at 6:34PM, Aug. 13, 2007
great liitle story...
spritecomic at 7:14AM, April 10, 2007
Interesting story. I felt it right in the soul.
Zenstrive at 3:28AM, April 8, 2007
nice narrator!
starbuckjones at 3:03AM, Dec. 14, 2006
Cool story Really enjoyed it
Pure Rock Casey at 8:34PM, Sept. 25, 2006
Brilliant!
simonitro at 7:10AM, Sept. 15, 2006
Here in appreciation I stand and clap, as this story's wings had to flap. The enjoyment in reading this story, it is something from you got a glory! this story is great! *Claps*
Darwin at 7:51AM, July 23, 2006
Hubby says you'd give Creepshow a run for its money here! Excellent art, the story arc was appropriately creepy. The prose got hard to read through at time, but it fit the style of the story. Well done Vega!
marine at 9:35AM, July 21, 2006
I like it.
subcultured at 10:34AM, July 20, 2006
awesoem ending. good job!
Tamerlane at 9:45AM, July 18, 2006
awesome story. loved the rhymes. Can't wait for the next story!
NekkoXIII at 8:50PM, July 17, 2006
ooooo i wonder what the next one is gonna be about...*waits*
Disgruntledrm at 3:47PM, July 17, 2006
Your rhymes for the comic have greatly improved since the beginning, and I just love the art. It reminds me of creep show (I know the movie is cheesy, but the style of art is still pretty similar.)
lefarce at 3:42PM, July 17, 2006
Surreal. I likes it!