Some kind of splash or bonus page i put together that i will include in the print version of Fullmoon Stories I'm working on. Look at all those pretty lights and colors.
Yeah I agree with you about the rhyme. There were times when it really worked though like the 'tale of a full moon' line and the bit about life flying by.
Anyway really nice work.
I really liked the rhyming, it gave the pages a nice flow. Plus, it is unique compared to the usual box panel and speech bubble comics (mine included).
I thought the rhyming was what made the comic mysterious and spooky. Otherwise it would just be a regular story. The narrator speaking the way he does made him creepy. I liked it the way you have been doing it. Sure you could use cooler words if you didn't have to rhyme but... You will also lose an essence that your comic has about it. In fact the rhyming might have been what hooked me in the first place.
Not all poetry rhymes, thats usually where poets go wrong when they try to force Rhymes.
But, there's always the half rhyme/fake rhymes that sound like Rhymes ;)
I think it perhaps mighth ruin the fact that the first two rhymed and the rest didn't. I thought the rhyming thing worked well, there were just a couple of mistakes. And you're only going to get better.
nibbi at 9:24AM, June 13, 2007
Yeah I agree with you about the rhyme. There were times when it really worked though like the 'tale of a full moon' line and the bit about life flying by. Anyway really nice work.
iowabarbidoll at 3:58PM, June 3, 2007
Very nice work on this. ~B
Darkmax at 7:19AM, June 2, 2007
Playing catch up on this one Beautiful work!!!! Byron The Devilfish Project
dgriff13 at 12:40PM, May 28, 2007
I just randomly picked your comic to review in the forums, and man was I glad I did! Outstanding work!
Aereis at 6:05AM, May 23, 2007
I really liked the rhyming, it gave the pages a nice flow. Plus, it is unique compared to the usual box panel and speech bubble comics (mine included).
Tantz_Aerine at 10:11AM, May 22, 2007
I liked the rhyme, but I am sure that whatever you come up with will still be excellent work :)
Peipei at 2:06AM, May 19, 2007
so gorgeous :3
NekkoXIII at 2:30PM, May 18, 2007
i'm interested to see how you are going to do the next story.
VegaX at 8:09AM, May 18, 2007
So the comics greatest strengths is also its greatest weakness.. Oh the irony! ;)
Maulgryve at 7:27AM, May 18, 2007
I thought the rhyming was what made the comic mysterious and spooky. Otherwise it would just be a regular story. The narrator speaking the way he does made him creepy. I liked it the way you have been doing it. Sure you could use cooler words if you didn't have to rhyme but... You will also lose an essence that your comic has about it. In fact the rhyming might have been what hooked me in the first place.
Conned at 4:09AM, May 18, 2007
Not all poetry rhymes, thats usually where poets go wrong when they try to force Rhymes. But, there's always the half rhyme/fake rhymes that sound like Rhymes ;)
Annhialator at 1:02AM, May 18, 2007
Hmm strange the rhyming worked fine with me.. not bad for a cover but beware of printing glowing effects on paper it's hard to get it right
Lukas Kirkby at 11:07PM, May 17, 2007
I think it perhaps mighth ruin the fact that the first two rhymed and the rest didn't. I thought the rhyming thing worked well, there were just a couple of mistakes. And you're only going to get better.