World 1, Page 15
NAAN on Aug. 18, 2008
Jan. 23, 2010
Fixed trees, Hostar's hair and dialogue for better flow :)
Original Post:
Sort of quoting a Hope/Crosby movie:
HATE…DESPISE…LOATHE…this page
Sorta.
I like the 3rd and 4th panel because of shading. I like the 1st because it's perfect.
Speech bubble placement….I don't even know
Hate the rest because of huge errors.
1) 2nd panel. Contributing to the part of the problem of setting the problem in Japan….I don't know exactly how the stairs leading up to the temple would look like, much less with trees. =\
2) Last panel. I need a reff shot of a hospital bed, which I don't even know if it's the same as Japanese beds in the nurses' stations at school, or like the American ones….and that made no sense.
I'm rambling already. Must be because I've been working on this page for 5 hours and it's 3:30AM.
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The buffer plan…didn't work out obviously. Guess that means it's either until Thanksgiving Break or Winter vactaion you'll see me again ;____; Sorry….
Some vote incentives:
TWC: A 100o-so x 600-so close-up of the 4th panel with Miyara. Details lost…*sniff* Now I know how Lady Yates of Earthsong feels ._.
Buzz: The uniform pattern that I'm using. I created it myself, based on a piece of cloth that I have. Careful, it's a bit bright ._.;;
In other news!
I decided to browse some sites and I went to Halfpixel's forum. I found this:
http://www.halfpixel.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=9267postdays=0postorder=ascstart=0
which partially made me feel bad because of what I just explained in the previous page. :x
I agree with some of the viewpoints and disagree with others. What about you?
That's about it. My mind's close to shutting down…
Thanks and enjoy!! :D
katyas at 11:24AM, Aug. 19, 2008
I love the "ate too much" thought picture in the background of the last panel. That's funny
albone at 9:54AM, Aug. 19, 2008
Ooooh, interaction!! Oy 200 curry buns sounds a little much. XD I'd say you need some medicine! Very nicely done NAAN, I'm only sorry we won't be seeing you again for some months. I hope school is good to you and try to drop in from time to time if you can. Cool voting incentives, I liked the pattern that you used and though some details got lost it was nice to see Miyara up close. So, Miyara saved the world? I think you did a fine job with the placement of the word balloons. As far as placement goes, just try to avoid covering heads, hands and any pretty art. I visit Halfpixel myself and I have to say that there's always a debate about the validity of manga in America. Some people think its the thing that will 'save' comics and others see it as out and out trash. I tend to fall in the middle myself and will read anything that is entertaining.