On the Road Again Willie Nelson inspiration since we was too lazy to draw that they were actually wandering down a road. Becuase I told the story so slowly in the last chapter I tried a different, more web-comicy, style by every page jumping a little ahead in the story for the set up. Don't know which works better. They both kinda worded for the story I guess. Anyways if you can't guess the plot so far here it is-Garret now works for the Thieves' Guild and is of decent rank to lead a 4 person squad of rogues on some mission…Sounds kinda Naruto-y but it works especially since all the girls are sisters and only work together anyways and Garret needed a partner and who better then some re-blooded females? Now they are on the road and Garret seems to have a thing for Shadow and is walking beside her and the other two are ahead, simply walking ahead. That's all so far.
This page is really lacking, no backgrounds, no real depth to what art is there and you have dialogue text actually intersecting some artwork, without use of a dialogue balloon.
As for the dialogue, in the first panel, got is broken up into two lines as "go" and "t" that just strikes me as very problematic when you want people to visit the comic more than once.
Also, some severe typos in that second panel, I really don't know what the deal was there. I suggest proof-reading before you post the comic.
Walrus at 4:28PM, Dec. 5, 2007
shoulda done this a long time ago. Fav'd!
JustNoPoint at 8:19PM, Dec. 3, 2007
Letting you know that Garret got his cameo in my comic today. (couldn't PQ you)
Garretjax at 2:26PM, Nov. 28, 2007
Fuck backgrounds as long as i get to keep my name as Garret "bitches" Jax i'm good
Sidwarrious at 1:19PM, Nov. 28, 2007
wel we do this for fun man. And I was late to update anyway so we were jes trying to get things going. Besides, when do we ever do "backgrounds"?
hpkomic at 10:10PM, Nov. 27, 2007
This page is really lacking, no backgrounds, no real depth to what art is there and you have dialogue text actually intersecting some artwork, without use of a dialogue balloon. As for the dialogue, in the first panel, got is broken up into two lines as "go" and "t" that just strikes me as very problematic when you want people to visit the comic more than once. Also, some severe typos in that second panel, I really don't know what the deal was there. I suggest proof-reading before you post the comic.