Slow Dawn Page Five
b1zz0b on Nov. 5, 2007
I shrank the page size down again…hopefully for the last time. :)
If this size is agreeable for everyone I will edit the previous pages when I get a chance…perhaps this weekend.
Mutiny
b1zz0b on Nov. 5, 2007
I shrank the page size down again…hopefully for the last time. :)
If this size is agreeable for everyone I will edit the previous pages when I get a chance…perhaps this weekend.
b1zz0b at 7:26PM, Nov. 6, 2007
That was something I myself also noted after it was too late to make a change, I wanted to keep the situation mysterious but in hindsight a little more dialog would have made the exchange more natural...but 'short and to the point' isn't exactly out of character for Cyrus as will be revealed in time. Cyrus himself is one of the ongoing mysteries that will play out over the course of the series (well beyond the events of Slow Dawn), especially his secretive dealings with Mary.
TheMidge28 at 4:59AM, Nov. 6, 2007
page looks great! Love Cyrus's character design. Only thing that seems awkward is the flow of dialogue after her question to cyrus...maybe explain further why nothing? or maybe that's how he is...just ahort and to the point.