Chapter One Page 11
D0m on June 23, 2007
Don't even ask why this was delayed. Long story.
Anyway, I made another style change with this one. The inking took about a day to complete, because I was being lazy and half-watching TV. I played around with perspective in the fourth panel and it came out decent. I like it. The first panel would have to be my favorite, though, the pose is very -her-.
Voting incentive this week is how page 11 looked in pencil format, before the 6+ hours of work put into it.
Visit the forums while you're here! Go on. Click the button, we'll kiss you if you give us fanart.
Big thanks to Sarah (as always) for inspiring me to change the font, FAL and ahumphres for inspiring me not to cut corners and draw every damn cobblestone.
As far as plot is concerned, we've established that Charna isn't out to kill the Queen. What happens next will be a bit trippier than then last few pages… what do -you- think will happen next? Where is Charna going?
Page 12 is:
DONE
VOTING INCENTIVE IS A PREVIEW OF THE NEXT PAGE! VOTE AWAY!!!
Because the comment box is NUTS
Bekefel: Thanks! I rather rushed that portion, but I'll be keeping you in mind when I make the background for the next few pages. You'll be seeing a -lot- of weather effects…;-) One more week till the next update, folks!!
Phil- Glad you noticed!
Silentkitty- The Queen doesn't like to look like she's human, if that makes any sense. @_o; Don't tell anyone, but she's still scared out of her mind!! And I'm glad you liked the cobblestones. You have FAL and ahumphres to thank for encouraging me!
Silverwordz- Have no fear! I think the next few pages won't be as intricate as the last few, and I'll be pencilling them into a sketchbook to see if I can directly scan and color… The story's hopefully going to be running along even more soon!
Cs3ink- Welcome! And I like that you feel it!
Nepath- I'm glad you think so! I was actually doubting myself earlier…
Slimredninja- Thanks! I'm glad people are feeling this world! Soon, I want you to be familiar with this place- I want you to know how it smells, tastes, looks and sounds. The land of the shdow is constant thunder and thick, dark, cold air at all times. Hope you enjoy your remaining stay- we won't be there much longer, but we could see a return…
Lughaidh- Nice avatar, haha… And thanks a lot! I hope the lands we travel to in Nadya will all leave a mark on your mind.
Maritalbliss- Thank you! Be sure to stick around, things get better!
Dangerfunk- She is a bit silly… I wonder what you all think about her and where she might have come from. Does she even -have- a past? Anyway, Believe me, Charna could do it. She -may- even prove it sometime…
dueeast at 1:18PM, June 24, 2007
I meant to say, I have to *strain* to read the fonts. Sorry about that!
dueeast at 1:17PM, June 24, 2007
The art and style are very nice, as is the plot twist. My only critique is that I have to read the fonts, especially when they're smaller. 4 out of 5.
MetalLuigi at 12:17PM, June 24, 2007
The new style is great! So Charna isn't bad after all? Or is she just tricking Nadya? Good plot twist, and great story so far!
FAL at 9:57AM, June 24, 2007
Wow, man what an improvement! I like this style better so far. As to what's going to happen...I have no damn idea!
blntmaker at 9:43AM, June 24, 2007
That last panel is off the chain! Great work and story here...Love the grey hue!
I heart artists at 8:27AM, June 24, 2007
Another beautiful piece!
Tantz_Aerine at 8:06AM, June 24, 2007
Well, she definitely have that irritating inbred blueblood attitude. Heh heh. Very well done on that first pose. It indeed is perfectly executed in showing just how arrogant she can become. I like how the room in panel four seems so utterly bare- yet the walls and the fireplace still suggest a once-affluent place. I wonder what [i]that[/i] backstory is. (Has Charna owned it ever since it was built or did she eat the owners and burn their stuff to keep warm? XD hehehe) Very nice style change in this one. It is crisper and offer a little more plasticity than the last one. You are improving very admirably :) Kudos to you!