I'm going to disagree slightly and say that an artist as strong as you should go with your instincts as far as subtle, occasional changes in style. Tell the story in the way you feel best and leave we readers to decide whether we like it and forgive the things we don't like. Though constructive criticism is helpful and, I'm sure, welcome, I've seen enough of your work to know that your choices are right more often than they're wrong. That being said, I didn't think the page in question was so bad, and a little levity amongst heavy subject matter isn't always bad.
Bloody wonderful work! I agree with Midge & ipokino. This is simply beautiful and emotional when you stick to the simple, but fluid style that you've produced most of you pages in. You've created a strong character in which I've quickly invested emotional interest. It's OBVIOUS you are enjoying yourself. This is fun, engaging, & my newest faved book. I'm looking forward to more.
Later,
Chip
@Midge & ipokino -- Thanks, guys, for your input. I agree about my 'silly' page -- it was a last minute addition, and an experiment that failed rather miserably. I'm usually very against redoing pages, but that one is something of a sticking point that probably will be revised when I get a moment.
I won't deny that I've been influenced by manga, though. ;)
Also -- I opted for screentone rather than full color because of time contraints & the possbility of self-publishing. My plan is 3 pages a week, and that would never really work if I was trying to churn out full-color. I'll add colored pages for the covers and for special moments here and there to really accentuate the mood.
I also have read through your posted work. I have to agree with Midge in all respects. I really wasn't pleased with the Manga 'emoticons' you ocassionally injected (manga tends to use formulaic bits that, while easy to create, don't really work with this type comic), but all told your story more than compensated. If I had a wish with this, I would wish you able to do the pages in the same rich color you use on your covers. It really makes the story pop, and looks tres professional as well! Anyway, have fun, and I'll be following along.
Nice page...great mood; Note: I have read through the comic. Good mood so far looking forward for more. I would stay with your style you have. The Manga stuff on one the pages where she acts silly over buying something...could be done without. It takes away from the somber mood that your trying to set for this struggling young woman. But over all your a great artist. Good mood so far! looking forward for more.
giovanni at 6:18PM, Sept. 12, 2007
im with the twist of gibson too, youre the artist, you decide
harryq at 6:17AM, Aug. 12, 2007
Not that it matters, but I'm with Gibson Twist. I'm also a fool for instinct.
Gibson Twist at 6:01PM, July 24, 2007
I'm going to disagree slightly and say that an artist as strong as you should go with your instincts as far as subtle, occasional changes in style. Tell the story in the way you feel best and leave we readers to decide whether we like it and forgive the things we don't like. Though constructive criticism is helpful and, I'm sure, welcome, I've seen enough of your work to know that your choices are right more often than they're wrong. That being said, I didn't think the page in question was so bad, and a little levity amongst heavy subject matter isn't always bad.
cs3ink at 8:13AM, July 19, 2007
Oh, I forgot the rating...
cs3ink at 8:13AM, July 19, 2007
Bloody wonderful work! I agree with Midge & ipokino. This is simply beautiful and emotional when you stick to the simple, but fluid style that you've produced most of you pages in. You've created a strong character in which I've quickly invested emotional interest. It's OBVIOUS you are enjoying yourself. This is fun, engaging, & my newest faved book. I'm looking forward to more. Later, Chip
Dani Russo at 7:16AM, July 19, 2007
@Midge & ipokino -- Thanks, guys, for your input. I agree about my 'silly' page -- it was a last minute addition, and an experiment that failed rather miserably. I'm usually very against redoing pages, but that one is something of a sticking point that probably will be revised when I get a moment. I won't deny that I've been influenced by manga, though. ;) Also -- I opted for screentone rather than full color because of time contraints & the possbility of self-publishing. My plan is 3 pages a week, and that would never really work if I was trying to churn out full-color. I'll add colored pages for the covers and for special moments here and there to really accentuate the mood.
ipokino at 9:12AM, July 17, 2007
I also have read through your posted work. I have to agree with Midge in all respects. I really wasn't pleased with the Manga 'emoticons' you ocassionally injected (manga tends to use formulaic bits that, while easy to create, don't really work with this type comic), but all told your story more than compensated. If I had a wish with this, I would wish you able to do the pages in the same rich color you use on your covers. It really makes the story pop, and looks tres professional as well! Anyway, have fun, and I'll be following along.
TheMidge28 at 8:50AM, July 17, 2007
Nice page...great mood; Note: I have read through the comic. Good mood so far looking forward for more. I would stay with your style you have. The Manga stuff on one the pages where she acts silly over buying something...could be done without. It takes away from the somber mood that your trying to set for this struggling young woman. But over all your a great artist. Good mood so far! looking forward for more.