Metempsychosis: page 13
Freakeh on Feb. 16, 2007
~Valentines Day update one page back~
I decided to upload the comic Saturday, Sunday and Monday. Firstly to give people a chance to catch up with updates if need be, but also to try out the delayed updating. So look out for an update on Monday as well! *Prays this page shows up on Saturday rather than as soon as I click “send”*
I apologise for so much white space on this page. It wasn't me being lazy I swear! I just felt it suited the mood most – time is slowing down for Z. in his mind, and a background wouldn't match that.
This chapter is taking a new direction all by itself – a script rewrite is in order! I'm glad though, as it seems to be including a lot of information about other characters that wouldn't be included for a long, long time otherwise. I'm hopeful the story development will take a shape I want it too. Heehee because of it though, I bet a lot of people will get confused between characters… but it'll all become clear in a few pages, so it's a risk I'm willing to take.
Responses! (Currently I'm responding to comments made thus far, on Friday. If more are made on the Valentines page between now and Saturday, I'll edit the author's notes to include replies to those too.)
@eko: Heehee yesh, your manga reminds me of Princess Ai too actually, if you've ever heard of that. ^_^ Just in the way that the main characters are singers at a club! i'm glad you liked my page x3
@Oren: You mean they're actually -recognisable- -as- roses?! XD Yay! I'm glad you thought ‘twas cute =3 it will be so fun to get to draw side-by-side.
Apparently, neither am I XD Oh wells I claim innocence!
@Rubygem: Yay the outfits are really fun to design =3 especially Miyoko’s dress xD I like her with her hair down O= Z.'s outfit here reminds me of the one he wears in chapter 8, so watch out for that :3
@magicalmisfits: aww thank you x3
@magick: I am shocked! Shocked I say! XD I cannot draw flowers to save my life, so the fact that you commented on them means a lot to me x3
@Dragonzilla: Awww I'm sorry to hear that ): Next year will be different, a lot can change in just a year :3 Thank you~ (about teh pic) :3
@simonitro: Capitalization, making messages sincere and enthusiastic! x3 Thank you for liking the picture so much~ I wasn't sure if it would be -romantic-, as it was hard to create such a mood between characters that aren't together! So yay for being able to convey that anyway ^_^ I hope you had a great Valentines Day~ regardless of what you -did- :3
@Dockworker: Funny you should mention that, as I thought the sky was what I rushed most… XD The page overall took about 12 hours, over two days. It doesn't really look like -that- much time was taken over it ): Just ‘cause it’s coloured pencil… XD
I'm happy you like the pose :3 I did a few preliminary sketches of the two in different poses, but nothing really suited -them-… at this stage of the story, anyway. I think tension between them suits Z. and Miyoko much more, so that's what I decided to focus on. I'm glad it worked ^_^
JillyFoo at 9:49PM, Feb. 17, 2007
what a mood you create. Very cool.
x_eko_x at 8:24PM, Feb. 17, 2007
Check your mail! Rawrrg!
Brokenhill at 5:05PM, Feb. 17, 2007
^_^ *thumbs up*
magickmaker at 3:52PM, Feb. 17, 2007
I'm a fan of the angle in the second to last panel. ...I feel guilty 'cause everyone else said so much and I just had this.
deleted-byrequest-03 at 2:02PM, Feb. 17, 2007
Wow, great hands in the first panel!
Oren at 12:16PM, Feb. 17, 2007
Yesh they are and they're vereh pretty too O: :heart: Dun dun dun dunnn! owo Aww you can tell that Miyoko is really down about the whole experience. ;~; poor girl I agree the whole white background thing does look better for the time slowing down effect. o: Supah nise!
Rubygem at 11:23AM, Feb. 17, 2007
GOD!that sword looks cool man freakeh I wish i could draw cool things!
Jashiku at 11:13AM, Feb. 17, 2007
Ahh, is that ash? aww, she looks so sad in the second panel. btw, that was a really cute valentine picture. =D
Toshubi at 10:25AM, Feb. 17, 2007
An other awesome page Freakeh! (Sorry I've been a stranger lately.) I can't help but smirk as I read this page and say to myself... "What a world! What a world! I'm melting! MELTING!!" (A quote from the Wizard of OZ)
gggggggghhhhhhhh55 at 9:10AM, Feb. 17, 2007
So dramatic....so wonderfully dramatic. I'm so mad I missed your Valentines Day update before. That picture was not only sweet, but beautifully drawn. I don't think I'd ever have the patience to draw all of those pretty flowers. XD It was such a romantic moment...but no where near as awesome as the one I colored of them kissing. XB Again, even with the very simple words, you manage to stun me. Miyoko's stuttering really fits the moment. I'm glad you didn't make it sound cheesy at all. A lot of comic I read that add that little stuttering sometimes ruin the moment. Boohoohoo. D: And that swirling pool of dust looking doodle poos he let go into the air is also a very nice touch. (hee hee....dust things XD) And he looks so calm...and then...all of a sudden...he makes that statment of defeat, and I feel oh-so-excited for what's to happen next. Excellent work! :D
x_eko_x at 8:00AM, Feb. 17, 2007
I've heard of it, but never read it. Hee...Elecia won't be singing for long! Bwahahaha! Wah! I finished the fan art! But I can't send it yet! I'm actually over at Monika's house, and I think she'd let me use her scanner. *raises hand* Question: Do you use pencils to color your pages? Because it's really good!
subcultured at 6:24AM, Feb. 17, 2007
cool last pan
LanceDanger at 6:08AM, Feb. 17, 2007
Oh, this is going to get even more interesting! Awesome :)
magicalmisfits at 5:34AM, Feb. 17, 2007
This page has so much movement even though the characters are not doig much. I like it alot.
EmilyTheStrange at 4:44AM, Feb. 17, 2007
Love the upword perspective on the second to last panel. Its great to see that you are trying new angels and such, it gives so much more life to a page.
Tantz_Aerine at 3:04AM, Feb. 17, 2007
That valentine's picture was really romantic and refreshing. Well done (and those roses were really greatly executed!) This page is really strong on the emotional factor. I love the angle of Zelig as he's gazing upon Malek's... um, remains. Also excellent stroke to have Miyoko wrap her arms around herself, for comfort. I see what you mean about the Donovan. I'd like to talk a little more about it on PQ, because they have just become really intriguing as entities. I can see where the sympathy can come this time, but I am sure there are many more pieces of the puzzle you have not yet revealed. I am therefore going to wait and see more. :) This story is getting more and more layers to it, which is MOST alluring to me! Kudos, kudos, kudos!!
LowResAtari at 2:57AM, Feb. 17, 2007
Daggum... I need to pay more attention to DD sometimes... I end up missing updates @_@ Now that I'm caught up... and looking at this page: ;_; so sad...
Nigellashade at 2:17AM, Feb. 17, 2007
This scene holds a lot of sorrow, for his to disappear.. All he wanted was to be free, but this means someone did this to him, and the others. They aren't totally without soul, and mortality.. But this scene here, is very poetic of mourning someone's life, that now has passed away within ashes. ~____~ Freakeh, I think this update holds a lot of meaning, and emotion. With love and hugs.. ~M~ v~~~~v
simonitro at 2:12AM, Feb. 17, 2007
Yup, that's why he was in a "dusty" mood lately. Ha ha ha! Anyway, Miyoko seems sad about what happened! She maybe feels isn't right for killing that soldier no what he was... Dramatic page, though...
DRose at 1:53AM, Feb. 17, 2007
I think the white space works. You've already established where they are in previous pages, and right now those two are where our focus is, so there is no real need for a background on this page. Its sad though, they were enemies not by choice but by circumstance and fate. It makes his death feel like a defeat rather than a victory I think. Since they never would've killed him under different circumstances.
Dragonzilla at 12:49AM, Feb. 17, 2007
Poor kids, life needs ta cut them a break, but rarely does it when bigger and badder things are looming on the horizon. And life has a funny way of preparing us for them. So hang in there kids, and stay together and strong, and you'll make it.
Jenshin at 11:11PM, Feb. 16, 2007
WHeee! I loved your valentines picture! It's so neat! Everything's colored and flowy. The composition is awesome. This page is so depressing in comparison.. I think that is a look of guilt on his face.
Luminous at 10:13PM, Feb. 16, 2007
Whee, I'm getting the first comment on this for once. Unless someone else posts while I'm typing this up xD Anyway, I think the white space works. That third panel is really good - it feels really stark and sad, and the perspective on Z and his sword is awesome. I'm curious about Miyoko in the second panel... She doesn't what? Something's totally about to happen O: