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yadiel on Sept. 14, 2007
We've got an update, I think that at this point I started to improve faster.
By the way, I updated the comixpedia entry, it's not that it helps a lot, but I added technical info I don't want to forget, but surely I'll have lots of mistakes, so if anyone would be so kind as to give it a look, I'll appreciate that.
Well no with the update, there's not really much to say, just that I keep forgeting to add their weapons everytime I draw them X_x
yadiel at 6:21AM, Sept. 19, 2007
=D thx for the comments and crits =D, right now I'm trying to do precisely what enef said, well more less =P saddly I can't do that every day, college hehehe, but thursday is the day to practice =D. And at the weekends I do the pages =D. No worries, you can put a 3 if it deserves it, I won't get mad. I came here to learn and improve, it is a hobby, but I would like to do it the better I can =D
Enef at 4:32AM, Sept. 19, 2007
Hmm, your forum signature said that crits were welcome so here goes. The pacing is good, the background work is good, the panelling and the flow is good. Those are all well done and deserved of a 3, 4 or 5 rating for them alone. Onto the bad parts. Your actual technical drawing skills aren't very good, i can see the effort is there, i can see you are really trying and it shows in the comic, it's just a matter of keeping doing what you are doing to improve, you will get there eventually just don't give up. Things that could help you to improve faster. It sounds cliche and horrible and i used to hate hearing it myself but it's true, LIFE STUDIES, every day get a few sheets of paper a few reference photos and draw them, draw them, draw them until they look good. BUT just drawing them won't help you much, look at them, study them, figure out why things look the way they look, why is the arm connected to the torso like that, how can i translate that well into a drawing? Then start breaking those drawings down into shapes and work on making it more stylised. If you keep doing that every single day, you should hopefully improve extremely quickly, if you start a blog or something to post them on people can point out places that you are going wrong, places that could be improved and places that look good already! Alright, that's a lot of text, hope it helps you. (Some tones on the pages may help to improve it too, it looks a little blindingly white right now.) I'll give you a HIGH 3 and a LOW 4 right now(It'll be a four on the rating, but i'm just letting you know what it actually would be if i could do it like that, haha) I'll be checking back again in a few weeks at least and seeing how it's going!
Kristen Gudsnuk at 9:13PM, Sept. 18, 2007
ooh how cute!! the background looks really awesome...it's perfect! good job.
yadiel at 5:00PM, Sept. 16, 2007
thx for all the comments =D
ShinGen at 12:21PM, Sept. 16, 2007
I just love this comic. The line art and inking rock and the backgrounds are beautiful when you have 'em. Then story line is interesting and the characters are really likable already. Bravo. Insta-fave.
Zippo Prower at 7:33AM, Sept. 16, 2007
All I can say is......WOW
stabbyfairy at 5:50AM, Sept. 16, 2007
Yeah, I can see the improvement here. You draw really nice backgrounds. That spring just looks so refreshing. =D Hahaha, I know what you mean about updating. I've got enough material for a decent buffer now, but I don't know if it's gonna stay that way... v_v
yadiel at 5:57PM, Sept. 15, 2007
I'm updating every saturday, so far I've been on schedule, and I have enought material to keep it that way =D
Cain at 11:31AM, Sept. 15, 2007
Finally an update.