Book One, page 36

bravo1102 on June 12, 2017

Last minute editing yet again. What looked fine two days ago just wasn't cutting it this morning. I am still struggling with word balloons and dialogue. So much of the tenor of the original has changed and even some info dump name dropping was cut but a vague reference was added.

Now even though everyone was talking smack about Duke Randall, no one will speak up in front of him. Hopefully some of the awkwardness of the conversation survives. The images I was working with didn't allow for much interplay and it just didn't seem right to add any bickering.