Thank you dogtopus for your detailed comment. This comic is a bit of experiment for me. I do not plan my comic as much as I should, I want to "get on with the story" too much sometimes. I will try to pace myself better ;)
Haha XD It is a bit random. XD I mean, it depends what you're goin' for, but this page would have worked better spread over two or three imo, it'd be nice to see some kind of development from maid to warrior. I mean, those lines in the last panel are great and do develop the character well, all in one rush it kinda feels like a snap decision, and yeah, it feels a bit random, made all the more so by the big serious rape buildup. Spread out over a whole page or two (or more, chapters even! you could get a shhitload out of that!) so the readers experience the process with her would work well I think. But yeah, it depends what you're aimin' for. :D
But yeah, I love your art! (I nearly gave a 4, but the art... wheee! I can't 4 that! XD) The expressions are real good especially. :D:D I'll be a-watchin!
TheMidge28 at 3:14PM, Oct. 16, 2007
ditto some of the comments already...
Terroquita at 4:43AM, May 2, 2007
Well, maybe I am repeating myself. I have used a rape scene as an opening twice now...
anonymous at 5:07PM, March 21, 2007
Hey, terroquita, I think the best way to start a comic is to have a rape scene
lothar at 7:35PM, Dec. 27, 2006
exactly what i would have done , that dude had some nice stuff !
glimmer at 2:19AM, March 1, 2006
so she took his weapons nice waste not want not and she did want a change of life style XD
glimmer at 2:11AM, March 1, 2006
very cool
Terroquita at 11:43PM, Feb. 28, 2006
Thank you dogtopus for your detailed comment. This comic is a bit of experiment for me. I do not plan my comic as much as I should, I want to "get on with the story" too much sometimes. I will try to pace myself better ;)
dogtopus at 4:44PM, Feb. 28, 2006
Haha XD It is a bit random. XD I mean, it depends what you're goin' for, but this page would have worked better spread over two or three imo, it'd be nice to see some kind of development from maid to warrior. I mean, those lines in the last panel are great and do develop the character well, all in one rush it kinda feels like a snap decision, and yeah, it feels a bit random, made all the more so by the big serious rape buildup. Spread out over a whole page or two (or more, chapters even! you could get a shhitload out of that!) so the readers experience the process with her would work well I think. But yeah, it depends what you're aimin' for. :D But yeah, I love your art! (I nearly gave a 4, but the art... wheee! I can't 4 that! XD) The expressions are real good especially. :D:D I'll be a-watchin!
Kage at 4:01PM, Feb. 28, 2006
wow...thas jus random....
Kim at 3:25PM, Feb. 28, 2006
Ooooooooooh!