Issue 6 Page 52 The END
JustNoPoint on June 1, 2009
Whoa… this it it! The longest prologue ever has finally came to an end!!! @_@
Two and a half years in the making. Man I didn't expect it to take so long heh. I don't really know what to say here. This feels a bit weird. I've been waiting to finish this up for SO LONG!
Now you'll really want to keep an eye on my DL Abridged, the Download CBR, and the cast pages. I'll be able to focus more on those to catch them up.
The CBR link will have cbr versions of the comics that you can download to your PC and PDF files. I may throw in some PSD files so you can see how I put some pages together.
Now to mention loose ends that were NOT tied up in the Prologue.
In issue 1.0 Power Grand tells Cutter Grand that it was the humans that sent the Preds the location of the underground base. Nothing was mentioned of this again.
Issue 1.5: Practically this whole issue. What happened to the peace talks with Robert Siegfried? Who were the 3 people that stole files and destroyed Eden? And what happened to Kevin? He never appeared in issue 3 even after Project Warrioress and Upgrade One were killed.
What was the War of Power about?
What happened to Jessica Fay Zeq and Sona Flourint Hess from Atlantis? Or Vedrick Von Col for that matter?
And other things like where is Den? What is the deal with GIA? Eve in general.
Let me know any loose ends I may have missed. I could have forgotten to mention them or I may not have even noticed I created one. In fact, give me feedback in general.
What was your favorite issue? Least favorite? What do I need to improve on the most in story writing, layouts, art, etc. What do you WANT to see? Not saying you will always get what you want but this is the time to gauge me.
The Prologue was fun and very annoying at the same time. The thing I loved/hated the most is that it never slowed down. The whole story was supposed to be a bubble gum story. A ride from point A to point B with little time to really get to know any characters. All that important stuff was to be shown in much greater detail in the next story.
But I couldn't keep to that idea. I revealed a lot more of Fenny and Sally than I intended. I wasn't going to explain Sally's condition, nor reveal Fenny's inner child struggle. There is still a LOT to reveal about the two though. The prologue is the only story that I made up in the late 90s as a teen that I didn't want to totally revamp. It was a self servicing nostalgia trip to retell such a off the wall story. I upgraded it just enough to make sense. But the spirit still remains intact. The 16 year old in me is finally happy and can rest in peace :3
The main thing I learned about the online comic medium that I will take with myself as I rescript the new story is the time it takes to make an issue complete. I will try much much harder to make each issue it's on story. I tried it here but this alien story felt too much like a run on story since there was barely any breaks at all. The best single story issue was issue 4 which happens to be one of my favorites as well.
Thank you all for supporting me. I didn't expect to garner an audience. I sure didn't think I would ever be in the top 10 on Drunk Duck. When I return I guarantee I will be good enough to finally be featured. But I have a tough road ahead. I have to improve so much. The next stories are much more daunting in my view than this one. And the issues are more serious at times. So I have to be able to back that up with better writing and art.
Again thank you for reading The Devon Legacy Prologue. I really hoped you enjoyed the roller coaster ride. And I look forward to seeing you browse on over to “The Devon Legacy” once that comic starts up. I'll be posting all the covers I received on the next update days. I'll probably throw some character design sketches to give you a glimpse of what's in store. And when “the Devon Legacy” starts updating I'll update here to tell everyone as well.
The Legacy begins next year! I'll reply on this page since there are no more “legit” updates. So if you give feedback please look back for replies. *passes out
cyberdog at 6:23AM, June 2, 2009
You know what, be a rebel. Refuse to do endings. Name the last page of every comic you do, THE BEGINING!
cyberdog at 6:21AM, June 2, 2009
THE END? I didn't think this story would have one, LOL. CyberDog out!
JustNoPoint at 5:44AM, June 2, 2009
Evil Emperor Nick: I consider myself one of those overzealous people that jump in with a super epic story without realizing just how much work it'll entail. Except I actually stuck with it and didn't stop 5 pages or so into it :P DAJBL: I think Fenny's just thinking how long it may take for her to get down from that condemned building :P The body language is supposed to show that she is still feeling under the weather from a page ago. Kinda hard to tell from this far away though. And yeah, I want to wait till next year to start Devon Legacy Proper. I want to get a lot better at my art. I tried a new method on this page for characters but am not really happy with the way the faces came out. Though my perspective is a LOT better on this page YIPEEE The buildings are finally getting on the right track. Thanks for the assist offer. I'll probably take it up! TheAboriginalOne: Waiting till next year will give us time to practice together as well! Maybe we can both start our comics together. And nope, the toxic wasn't cleared. I just don't think they are noticing details like that at the moment. And it will take more than near obliteration to shake Ashley. She makes a return too. The revisit to Atlantis will be a while sadly. Doctor Shadow: Awesome. I'll just reboot the Prologue then! ;-) mlai: 267 pages of story. Not counting covers and other extras. And I don't think anyone has to worry about the craziness going away. I mean I will still have very off the wall stories and characters. It just won't be hitting the protagonists as hard all in a short period of time. They'll at least have time to register the craziness =P Don't expect the comic to shift to something dark and brooding. I still like bright colored and exciting stories. Some may be darker at times. But then the next issue could just be Sally in her garden singing for 96 pages. [quote]And, you should take longer to craft each page of your new story.[/quote] My biggest hurtle :( The longer it takes to make a page the less story gets told. I hate the trade off so much! Some people can sketch out great works in a quick amount of time. I have to get solid enough to do this! One update a week would give me maybe one and a half issues a year. I wouldn't get ANYWHERE like that. Ugh, I need to get rich and pay an artist XD Drawing 2 should be coming up while I am on hiatus. It's a figure drawing class. I'll try and take it. usedbooks: LOL Fenny and a future character are "SO cliche" XD And cut little sis some slack. SIX FOOT tall dad is in the way! =p
usedbooks at 4:10AM, June 2, 2009
Oh, if only anyone there knew what really happened... Nice fireworks-esque effect. I'm glad Sally's family is safe (for now). Tragic orphans are SO cliche, and Sally is tragic enough! I want to start calling her "Mew" now, though. XD Shame on her sister for standing on the furniture! Near apocalypse or not, it's no excuse for uncivilized behavior! I can't give you overall feedback, since I tend to enjoy stories as a whole. I hope the scattered nitpicks were of some help, though. Man, a whole year... That's slightly longer than your usual hiatus. ;-) We'll be waiting. (FARCE = Federal Agency for the Regulation of Cryptozoological Entities)
mlai at 2:33AM, June 2, 2009
OMG it's over! How many pages total has it been? I can only wish I draw that many pages of my own comics within 2.5 years. [u]Writing:[/u] The crazy story of DLP is actually why it became pseudo-famous, LOL. You know what I'm talking about. It's like Ed Wood's ghost touched you (inappropriately). I honestly don't know what you intend to do for DLF, in terms of tone, pacing, themes, etc etc. You'll most likely try to lose a lot of the craziness, but that means something else has to fill that void. We'll see what that something would be. [u]Art:[/u] Yeah you definitely have to train hard if you want to start doing a "serious" story. Maybe you need to go as far as signing up for a college figure drawing course. Personally, I just trained by copying Marvel/DC comics art, as well as studying legit "How To" art books. But according to BT, nothing beats a class. And, you should take longer to craft each page of your new story. Pay attention to the perspective and accuracy of buildings and vehicles that you draw. You're getting better and better at that. Avoid your depiction of objects looking juvenile, as if a 12 y/o drew them. There's no shortcut about it except to spend the required time and attention to drawing objects. (Actually, there are shortcuts, such as using solid blacks to substitute for details... but that requires advanced light/shadow knowledge.)
Doctor Shadow at 2:10AM, June 2, 2009
*high 5* loved it all :)
TheAboriginalOne at 12:41AM, June 2, 2009
Next year? awww.... I get out of the service next year. Yay!!! Yay Devon, and his Legacy! Glad to see the family is alright. Glad no one noticed that she came without her respirator... or was the toxic cleared? And seriously, where's the "Adam" for Sally's "Eve?" I hope the world's not shaken enough to disrupt Ashley's persona. I would love a revisit to Atlantis, and the running gag of full names again.
DAJB at 11:21PM, June 1, 2009
Aaaaw! We loves us a happy ending! (Or beginning!) Lovely shot of Fenny on the rooftop, too. Kind of reminds me of Batman/Daredevil keeping watch over [i]their[/i] city! Anyway, congrats on a [i]huge[/i] achievement! Looking forward to the start of the story "proper" next year (next year?!) I wouldn't dare presume to tell you "where you could improve" (I'm just in awe of what you've managed to do here!) but, if you do want to think more about any aspect of the writing (you mentioned pacing, for example) then PQ me and I'd be happy to bounce some ideas back and forth. Once again - well done! I'm shocked to learn this hasn't been featured. A remarkable piece of work!
Evil Emperor Nick at 10:39PM, June 1, 2009
Congrats on finally finishing the Prolog. You should be proud you saw it to the end....of the the begining(SP). That is more then most people do for a project of this size.
JustNoPoint at 10:30PM, June 1, 2009
Greyman: Yup, it won't be the last of them for sure. Doctor Shadow: He's my favorite character to write dialogue for thus far! Tantz Aerine: I couldn't go the last 2 pages without "some kinda" light show going on XD And I don't think Tresha will like you using the word "couple" to describe them :P ttyler: Thanks, TBH I just ran out of space the page before and had to think of a way to fit it on that page heh waff: I think they turn into X-mas trees then. usedbooks: You seem to always like the dialogue when Mote and Tresha are on page ^^ And yeah, NYC has always had it rough. What did FARCE stand for? My best acronym to date its the one I had for the 1st comic I made at the age of 9. [i]HAWKs Hurting And Whipping Killers[/i]. Top that one! mlai: Are you saying I made them speak British? :P DAJB: Mote has to use those screens for more than real work you know. Captain Death: Glad someone sees Mote's side! albone: "This time"? You saying he has been, or ever will be WRONG?!! I can't believe the audacity!!! DrProfessorman: He reminds me mostly of House now. Though he acted this way long before House was on the air. I consider it a compliment to know he comes off House-like. khard12: Admitting being wrong. Nothing can be worse. I would rather take a 1000 anal probes... wait, that can be taken under the wrong context. You didn't read this comment, go away!!! ;-) Evil Emperor Nick: It looks like a van. But I need to stylize my vehicles a bit more. I'll work on that in my offtime. amanda: HAHA I'm glad I could slap you back into Mote reality ^_^ DevilLad: Nope, they are not new. They appeared on [url=http://www.drunkduck.com/The_Devon_Legacy_Prologue/index.php?p=381772]this page here[/url] 1st. patrickdevine: The thing that really sucks is climbing up all the stairs to get up and down :( The design of the van came from looking at FBI vans and weather vans. I just figure I chose a van because vans rule! And yeah, the inside did turn out too big. Even after I thinned it up more. I should have placed the door on a certain side. It looks like 2 more doors can fit in the back. Which is WAY too wide. I'll practice working on space too :P jgib99: Thanks! Aghammer: Nice that you can look past her burn on her face to see Tresha's cuteness :-P