The Freak Page 3
Trisscar on July 13, 2009
When I look back on this page, I think to myself…. what on earth was the point of that first panel? I feel like I just randomly stuck a city in it without thinking about it. And the dialogue makes me want to cringe -_-'
In the original thumbnail pages, there were going to be five girls here, but because of issues with time, I had to cut it down to three.
Trisscar at 11:28AM, Sept. 14, 2009
I'll keep that in mind for next time. Thanks for your comment! :)
Aea Riga at 6:17AM, Sept. 14, 2009
The first panel is TONS better than I could do (curse you straight lines!) Maybe some signs of life? Helicopter, birds, or even some guy smoking on the roof?
Trisscar at 7:17AM, July 14, 2009
That is what I wanted the reader to think, that the story is indeed set in a city, but I just don't feel like I pulled it off properly. I feel as though something else was needed in there, but I'm not sure what.
Wordweaver_three at 4:56AM, July 14, 2009
The first panel lets the reader know that we are indeed in a city. Either that or you REALLY like to draw windows. Chick dialogue is always cringe inducing.
Aleks55 at 4:04AM, July 14, 2009
I sense trouble a brewing