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Avart on Aug. 30, 2017
I'm not used to draw naked women (well, nipples I mean) and I feel kinda odd.
Originally I've censored these pages like the previous ones (Hitomi's hair covered her breasts) but after a little struggle within me and consulting with some friends I've decided to show this up. But this doesn't mean that I'm showing more than this (or what you've already seen in previous chapters… ‘panty-shots’ mainly) or this will go hentai.
And, for the violent and bloody side, that's another story and you soon will see some (or maybe much) blood other than the little showing here.
Last but not least, I'll publishing (sadly) only a page for week and on Sundays. This is because, even though I have some backup pages already done (around 15) those aren't enough to maintain this rythm. I'm working on chapter 5 at this time and it's on an early stage of development.
Thank you all for supporting me! :D
AmeliaP at 3:21PM, Sept. 3, 2017
I wondering if she always is violent, or that bite she got makes her violent... questions, questions
Avart at 7:49PM, Sept. 9, 2017
She has so many repression inside. Hayate is her first crush... well, if we don't take Kokoro into account. About the bite, we'll see that later :D
KimLuster at 6:11PM, Sept. 1, 2017
Sometimes, depending on the mood and theme of a story, trying too hard to censor nudity (and language and violence) just feels... wrong! Like you're not being true!! I did the same with the Godstrain forever and finally decided I shouldn't hide it, but still be subtle and non-gratuitous when called for... I think the nudity totally fits here in your story (helps that your a master of anatomy haha)! And wow has Hitomi taken charge - I like it!!
Avart at 3:45PM, Sept. 2, 2017
I've noticed what you said on the Godstrain, and I think in a mature-oriented story showing some nudity or blood (perhaps a little gore?) it will be 'normal'. Thanks for the compliment! :D
GuyWithChainsaw at 2:22PM, Aug. 31, 2017
It's definately a bold move to include uncensored woman nipples. I'm glad you are pushing yourself to do things that you are not fully comfortable with though. And about what you said, even with nudity a story still can be subtle but if you cross the line an erotic story could turn into a hentai. I'm glad you are aware of this and after 69 pages of The Gloom I'm sure you know what you are doing and will deliver a quality story. Cheers!
Avart at 3:40PM, Sept. 2, 2017
Thanks my friend! You're right, that's why I'm working so hard on the script and layout to give a quality story :D
Jason Moon at 10:01PM, Aug. 30, 2017
Now Hitomi is the agressor :0 It's incredible the amount of intensity and emotion your able to display in every panel. Just when I think I have Hitomi figured out she turns it around and surprises me. I'm glad you are displaying your comic the way you want to. The realm of horror is to shock and horrify and it's deep tradition has always shown some nudity and gore. A topless scene in a horror setting always has you fixed in because YOU KNOW something more than magic in the bedroom is going to happen lol. Great realism and beauty captured in Hitomi. Her unexpected behavior is almost startling
Avart at 3:38PM, Sept. 2, 2017
She's full of surprises :D But we'll discovering as the story continues. I'm a big fan of horror movies (mostly of the 80's and 90's) and that's true: a topless scene is a must!
crankywriter at 8:34PM, Aug. 30, 2017
I think that a hentai is defined as being stories built around sex, as opposed to stories with sex. There are a number of shows, and movies that show as much a hentai/porn, but aren't classified as such. I think that this is one of those stories that you could show a graphic sex scene, but it wouldn't be hentai because it's more about the characters, than the sex.
Avart at 3:34PM, Sept. 2, 2017
Thank you, I appreciate your comment :D
bravo1102 at 8:23PM, Aug. 30, 2017
A handful of nipple scenes does not a hentai make. Sometimes it can work to ramp up the tension like here. When a woman asserts herself like that and the nipples are shown it's more powerful because she's showing contempt for cultural mores about shame and nudity.
Avart at 3:31PM, Sept. 2, 2017
Very true, thanks Bravo!