Yeah I was the same way with a couple of my strips a few months ago, they seemed fine to me but after my sister read them she said she understood them, but had problems with the text bubbles. I found out it messes up the flow of a cartoon if they have to rearrange them or put them in an order their not accustomed to. cartoon becomes non flowing.
Yeah I was the same way with a couple of my strips a few months ago, they seemed fine to me but after my sister read them she said she understood them, but had problems with the text bubbles. I found out it messes up the flow of a cartoon if they have to rearrange them or put them in an order their not accustomed to. cartoon becomes non flowing.
This looks pretty good. But I would just suggest moving the speach bubbles around, especially in the 3rd panel. Jay says stop then gram starts talking then stops. a little off
Garwik at 10:07AM, Aug. 15, 2006
Ha! This looks interesting.
mackmm at 7:52AM, Aug. 15, 2006
Yeah I was the same way with a couple of my strips a few months ago, they seemed fine to me but after my sister read them she said she understood them, but had problems with the text bubbles. I found out it messes up the flow of a cartoon if they have to rearrange them or put them in an order their not accustomed to. cartoon becomes non flowing.
mackmm at 7:50AM, Aug. 15, 2006
Yeah I was the same way with a couple of my strips a few months ago, they seemed fine to me but after my sister read them she said she understood them, but had problems with the text bubbles. I found out it messes up the flow of a cartoon if they have to rearrange them or put them in an order their not accustomed to. cartoon becomes non flowing.
SilverBlackwolf at 11:46AM, Aug. 14, 2006
I agree the bubbles are a little hard to follow. Still like the comic very much.
Debris at 1:22PM, Aug. 12, 2006
This looks pretty good. But I would just suggest moving the speach bubbles around, especially in the 3rd panel. Jay says stop then gram starts talking then stops. a little off