CHP 01 PAGE 13
theshazerin on Dec. 8, 2010
Yay! Time for this week's update! XD
Well today Kitty explains about the strange happenings that went last night… The reason why I said “As if someone was having an intense battle in the sky” was because the explosions and the metal clanging sounds that the townspeople heard seem to come from the rooftop, thus it sounded like some battle was taking place in the sky.
Sorry if the dialogue is not that clear. In the early pages I said that I needed a writer… Well, that's coz I don't know much about expression of language and words.. i wish I have someone to write a captivating script for me.. But that's juz wishful thinking. *_*"
So! After my BMT I will work on my dialogue and narration scripts! YEAH! And please do stay tuned next week for more of The Mannequin Waltz! XD
Luccia at 10:02AM, Dec. 11, 2010
Battles in the sky(or as you said on roof tops) are never any good. I think the wording is fine =) Bloody well done!