Those that think that others know nothing are often the ones unknowing.
[quote]Flame wars are not cause of people like me, its from people who say the dumbest stuff like[/quote]
[quote]NO,ITS PEACE THEN BOOM EVERYTHING OR ARE YOU JUST STUPID!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1[/quote]
Lol
Sorry Umbreon Queen for having so much posts to make Quaklin understand. Glad your taking your critism.
... i hate adults they think they know everything and now i hate u case u to think u know everything. it seems that u don't know what maturity is cause u say i have been out of line but i haven't (enless babe says so) i've been telling u that what u said is wrong with this is wrong that is all and what lefarce said i don't cause he to has helped me so i won't say anying any more. sorry lefarce
LOL I have not been intimidating, I gave my opinion, Umbreon accepted it along with everyone else's, and you flipped your lid, you have acted out of line presumably to try and protect your friend here, but she seems mature minded enough to cope with crit without you freaking out at the sign of a negative opinion. I do be leave that you are entirely in the wrong here, so I think it is more your place to shut it, although feel free to reply to this message, but I'm gonna take the grown-up option and leave this now so Umbreon can get some more uninfluenced good or bad opinions :-)
Oh right sorry, my mistake, childish and imature comments like "NO,ITS PEACE THEN BOOM EVERYTHING OR ARE YOU JUST STUPID!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1" do nothing to stir up crap...ì_ì
Flame wars are not cause of people like me, its from people who say the dumbest stuff like: this comic sucks and theirs sucks or people say you didn't do that right and give a 1 and they don't say what you did wrong. Anyway sorry Lefarce and babe I'm beinging a real pain so I'll shut-up now *blows gasget*
lefarce summed it up much better than I could. And thank you once again Umbreon Queen for being a decent minded comic artist in taking on board the crits of others. As for you Quacklin, you need to calm down, it's because of people like you that flame wars start, immaturity breeds immaturity.
I look forward to seeing how the comic improves over time Umbreon :-)
Opening - Travis is born
Plot point - It's established that Travis' father is killed by a hunter there ya go travis' father is killed by a hunter same as natalie's her mom is killed by a bug
Duck Hunt is nothing like this. DH has plot and build up. For example, here is how DH breaks down:
Opening - Travis is born
Plot point - It's established that Travis' father is killed by a hunter, and his body is carried away by "the dog", who is the hunter's aid
Problem - Travis tried to avenge his father, but is struck down. He returns to find that the hunter has burned his home town
Resolution - Some of the survivors put together a make-shift army. Travis takes over the army to pursue his own means
Second Opening - We're now in the present. Travis is older, and he has friends in the military (which we've establish he runs)
Plot point - Travis second in command, Marquise, was saved by Travis on the battle field, making the two close friends. However, Travis has relations with Marquise's wife
Problem - Marquise sells Travis out to the Dog, who sells the information to the Hunter, who burns the village again
Resolution - I won't say much, as it would be spoiling the plot, but Travis and Marquise engaged in a fight to the death, inside the home of Carmon (Marquise's wife and Travis lover)
See, I write things out, like that, and I collect my thoughts and calmly go about making my comic. This weeds out any confusion, as I simplify it before I even begin to write anything. It's called an "outline". This is just (as Anch0vy said) 'nothing nothing nothing BAM! EVERYTHING!
DH/Natalie is a poor comparison, they share nothing (sides the use of Anthropomorphic characters) in common. This comic does little to explain the action. There needs to be a plot, a problem and THEN a resolution. This is just a resolution, and it totally skips the first few steps.
I'm glad she's taking advice so well. And perhaps she'll look into what I just said. Trust me, it will help you in the long run. I do it with all of my work. Please, feel free to take a gander and some of the stuff I've made, and see if it's the right thing for you. If not, then I'm sorry for wasting your time. But you'll see that the comics I've made run at a moderate pace and are very understandable, thanks to my formula.
alright before i go crazy how is it you think it should be longer it looks alright straight to the pointand besides this sounds like the plot anyway so shut-up. sorry for posting so much.
LOL Quacklin Calm down, Umbreon Queen is being a good sport and listening to peoples opinions (Thanks Umbreon), where as you are acting like I just killed your mother or something o_O I'm not even talking to you so please shush or act that of a respectable mental age to your physical one.
I meant it feels like nothing then suddenly everything is crammed together, like this should be in more than 4 boxes with almost no dialogue at all and the death of a character so quality that you don't know ANYTHING about them or the world around them or even why it came to be.
This comic moves waaay too fast. It could have been broken into more panels or even into a few strips. I don't really know what's going on, it's just out of the blue Nat's mother gets stabbed.
I dunno, no matter how ignorant I've been though life, explosions have normally stopped me playing with Choa...
Also I do see lefarce's point, it's very 'nothing nothing nothing BAM! EVERYTHING!', feels like it's kinda been crammed into one strip when you could have maybe made this into a few strips and explained a bit more, at least I think that's what lefarce meant.
will123 at 7:04PM, Dec. 2, 2006
srry for double post and it was suppose to be a 5 i scrolled down a bit and it went to 4
will123 at 7:04PM, Dec. 2, 2006
cool
will123 at 7:04PM, Dec. 2, 2006
cool
jef dam5 at 10:19AM, Nov. 5, 2006
Those that think that others know nothing are often the ones unknowing. [quote]Flame wars are not cause of people like me, its from people who say the dumbest stuff like[/quote] [quote]NO,ITS PEACE THEN BOOM EVERYTHING OR ARE YOU JUST STUPID!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1[/quote] Lol Sorry Umbreon Queen for having so much posts to make Quaklin understand. Glad your taking your critism.
Quacklin at 2:02PM, Nov. 4, 2006
... i hate adults they think they know everything and now i hate u case u to think u know everything. it seems that u don't know what maturity is cause u say i have been out of line but i haven't (enless babe says so) i've been telling u that what u said is wrong with this is wrong that is all and what lefarce said i don't cause he to has helped me so i won't say anying any more. sorry lefarce
Anch0vy at 12:56PM, Nov. 4, 2006
LOL I have not been intimidating, I gave my opinion, Umbreon accepted it along with everyone else's, and you flipped your lid, you have acted out of line presumably to try and protect your friend here, but she seems mature minded enough to cope with crit without you freaking out at the sign of a negative opinion. I do be leave that you are entirely in the wrong here, so I think it is more your place to shut it, although feel free to reply to this message, but I'm gonna take the grown-up option and leave this now so Umbreon can get some more uninfluenced good or bad opinions :-)
Quacklin at 11:56AM, Nov. 4, 2006
no that was in no manner childish intimadaing someone which you are doing sometimes starts them so shut it!!!
Anch0vy at 7:53AM, Nov. 4, 2006
Oh right sorry, my mistake, childish and imature comments like "NO,ITS PEACE THEN BOOM EVERYTHING OR ARE YOU JUST STUPID!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1" do nothing to stir up crap...ì_ì
Quacklin at 6:22AM, Nov. 4, 2006
Flame wars are not cause of people like me, its from people who say the dumbest stuff like: this comic sucks and theirs sucks or people say you didn't do that right and give a 1 and they don't say what you did wrong. Anyway sorry Lefarce and babe I'm beinging a real pain so I'll shut-up now *blows gasget*
Anch0vy at 5:37AM, Nov. 4, 2006
lefarce summed it up much better than I could. And thank you once again Umbreon Queen for being a decent minded comic artist in taking on board the crits of others. As for you Quacklin, you need to calm down, it's because of people like you that flame wars start, immaturity breeds immaturity. I look forward to seeing how the comic improves over time Umbreon :-)
Quacklin at 11:15PM, Nov. 3, 2006
Opening - Travis is born Plot point - It's established that Travis' father is killed by a hunter there ya go travis' father is killed by a hunter same as natalie's her mom is killed by a bug
lefarce at 9:48PM, Nov. 3, 2006
Duck Hunt is nothing like this. DH has plot and build up. For example, here is how DH breaks down: Opening - Travis is born Plot point - It's established that Travis' father is killed by a hunter, and his body is carried away by "the dog", who is the hunter's aid Problem - Travis tried to avenge his father, but is struck down. He returns to find that the hunter has burned his home town Resolution - Some of the survivors put together a make-shift army. Travis takes over the army to pursue his own means Second Opening - We're now in the present. Travis is older, and he has friends in the military (which we've establish he runs) Plot point - Travis second in command, Marquise, was saved by Travis on the battle field, making the two close friends. However, Travis has relations with Marquise's wife Problem - Marquise sells Travis out to the Dog, who sells the information to the Hunter, who burns the village again Resolution - I won't say much, as it would be spoiling the plot, but Travis and Marquise engaged in a fight to the death, inside the home of Carmon (Marquise's wife and Travis lover) See, I write things out, like that, and I collect my thoughts and calmly go about making my comic. This weeds out any confusion, as I simplify it before I even begin to write anything. It's called an "outline". This is just (as Anch0vy said) 'nothing nothing nothing BAM! EVERYTHING! DH/Natalie is a poor comparison, they share nothing (sides the use of Anthropomorphic characters) in common. This comic does little to explain the action. There needs to be a plot, a problem and THEN a resolution. This is just a resolution, and it totally skips the first few steps. I'm glad she's taking advice so well. And perhaps she'll look into what I just said. Trust me, it will help you in the long run. I do it with all of my work. Please, feel free to take a gander and some of the stuff I've made, and see if it's the right thing for you. If not, then I'm sorry for wasting your time. But you'll see that the comics I've made run at a moderate pace and are very understandable, thanks to my formula.
Quacklin at 9:48PM, Nov. 3, 2006
alright before i go crazy how is it you think it should be longer it looks alright straight to the pointand besides this sounds like the plot anyway so shut-up. sorry for posting so much.
Umbreon_Queen at 9:37PM, Nov. 3, 2006
Improvement, sorry
Umbreon_Queen at 9:37PM, Nov. 3, 2006
I promise the next one will be an improvemen!
speedingbullet at 9:28PM, Nov. 3, 2006
wha... what?
Anch0vy at 9:21PM, Nov. 3, 2006
LOL Quacklin Calm down, Umbreon Queen is being a good sport and listening to peoples opinions (Thanks Umbreon), where as you are acting like I just killed your mother or something o_O I'm not even talking to you so please shush or act that of a respectable mental age to your physical one. I meant it feels like nothing then suddenly everything is crammed together, like this should be in more than 4 boxes with almost no dialogue at all and the death of a character so quality that you don't know ANYTHING about them or the world around them or even why it came to be.
rengori at 9:20PM, Nov. 3, 2006
This comic moves waaay too fast. It could have been broken into more panels or even into a few strips. I don't really know what's going on, it's just out of the blue Nat's mother gets stabbed.
Quacklin at 9:17PM, Nov. 3, 2006
NO,ITS PEACE THEN BOOM EVERYTHING OR ARE YOU JUST STUPID!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
Umbreon_Queen at 9:14PM, Nov. 3, 2006
Woops! You right Soonme! Sorry!
Anch0vy at 9:08PM, Nov. 3, 2006
I dunno, no matter how ignorant I've been though life, explosions have normally stopped me playing with Choa... Also I do see lefarce's point, it's very 'nothing nothing nothing BAM! EVERYTHING!', feels like it's kinda been crammed into one strip when you could have maybe made this into a few strips and explained a bit more, at least I think that's what lefarce meant.
soonmme at 9:06PM, Nov. 3, 2006
the bug people sprites need shading and the coler for this one is a bit to bright
Quacklin at 9:00PM, Nov. 3, 2006
how can it be too hectic and confusing if your duck hunt thing is worse on stuff like this???
lefarce at 8:53PM, Nov. 3, 2006
I find this to be too hectic and confusing for me to read. Sorry.
Umbreon_Queen at 8:53PM, Nov. 3, 2006
Thanks.