Oh, and a tip for the next comic, right now none of us really know the name of the yellow guy or anything, just have someone call him by name or him introduce himself to someone, it's the best and most simple way to explain the most important thing about a character, there name :-)
I angree with anch0vy it's much better then the other ones but still a little crammed also your grammar and spelling sucks and the plot has some things that should be fixed EX:what happened between those 20 mins if you don't explain that it will be hard to tell what's going on now for the good things good sprites good characters you resized everything right =3
welll that's about it I hope you work on tihs comic some more
A good improvement on the last comic, I can't put my finger on it, but something still feels a little crammed, if I work it out I will let you know, other than that it's looking good :-) Oh, and remember to watch out for blank space in speech bubbles, people ain't very forgiving of that (although the speech bubbles seem ok in this one, what I mean is that close up on the yellow guy, the black box above his head with text in, theirs a large blank chunk of that, some people won't like that).
KingSkullkid at 5:59AM, Feb. 20, 2007
I feel a little weirded out, but nice page.
will123 at 7:06PM, Dec. 2, 2006
i like the speech bubbles
Wes_Nero123 at 10:49AM, Nov. 5, 2006
yay update, i find it creepy he would be atraccted to a five year old, but hey evil guys are creepy anyways! FaV'ed
Umbreon_Queen at 9:09AM, Nov. 5, 2006
Ok
Anch0vy at 9:00AM, Nov. 5, 2006
Oh, and a tip for the next comic, right now none of us really know the name of the yellow guy or anything, just have someone call him by name or him introduce himself to someone, it's the best and most simple way to explain the most important thing about a character, there name :-)
Quacklin at 8:12AM, Nov. 5, 2006
wow some of you guys have no clue
Umbreon_Queen at 8:11AM, Nov. 5, 2006
Oh and on the top panel it's supposed to have horrid grammer 'cause she's, like, 5
Umbreon_Queen at 8:03AM, Nov. 5, 2006
It's because she's stopping... not that the person is saying stop.
soonmme at 7:46AM, Nov. 5, 2006
in the second panel 'stop' doesn't have a tail, and it would look a bit beter with hearts red other than yellow,still pretty good
Quacklin at 7:05AM, Nov. 5, 2006
evanneo how dare you say her spelling and grammer suck if your not sure don't say it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Umbreon_Queen at 6:35AM, Nov. 5, 2006
Actually, I have word and I spelled it all right, liege is spelled like that, wierd but true.
evanneo at 6:24AM, Nov. 5, 2006
I angree with anch0vy it's much better then the other ones but still a little crammed also your grammar and spelling sucks and the plot has some things that should be fixed EX:what happened between those 20 mins if you don't explain that it will be hard to tell what's going on now for the good things good sprites good characters you resized everything right =3 welll that's about it I hope you work on tihs comic some more
Quacklin at 5:53AM, Nov. 5, 2006
very good but lets talk about Ben-gee's personality
Anch0vy at 5:10AM, Nov. 5, 2006
A good improvement on the last comic, I can't put my finger on it, but something still feels a little crammed, if I work it out I will let you know, other than that it's looking good :-) Oh, and remember to watch out for blank space in speech bubbles, people ain't very forgiving of that (although the speech bubbles seem ok in this one, what I mean is that close up on the yellow guy, the black box above his head with text in, theirs a large blank chunk of that, some people won't like that).
Kiji at 4:02AM, Nov. 5, 2006
lol